he thunders
she bows her head
silenced
A contest entry
- anything & prewites by whos my humblepie.
600 points, ended July 20, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SWALLOW HAIKU CONTEST by Swan song.
450 points, ended July 27, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What be your thoughts?
Comments
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This created an image very clear so well done thanks for entering.
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Haiku's are about nature so I gather here you are talking about a storm of the most natural things we all know about. Your choice of words are excellent...
novy
count 3,4,3
I have knowledge of this modern haiku form...
Well after a some research with this wonderful poetess I learned it can be about a pair of shoes...in this traditional form...Thanks for the information
Now I see the verbal fight...LOL

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It isn't about a storm at all.
It's about a father yelling at his daughter, and she gives up.
I've read a lot of haikus that weren't about nature, actually. But thank you.
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