Like a soft whisper
Your voice is in my ear
A ghostly memory that haunts
me till this day
Strawberry was the sweet
taste of your kiss
In a single moment, lost in
those eyes
Felt like heaven sent me
an angel
Now that your gone all that
is left
Are pictures and memories
Locked inside this house
What I wouldn't give to
hold you once again
To tell you I love you
Watch you smile with joy
Can time be so cruel?
Can life really be this
empty?
Alas your only at the store
A contest entry
- Kill me with the last line. by Loki.
1750 points, ended July 25, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Hmm intersting....this was great. The last line significantly altered the tone of the piece. Glorious work!! And good luck in the contest with me
~Emily~ xx
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Good Luck.
You might want to revisit your usage of "your" and "you".
Only real problems I saw.
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