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"When I Kissed You"

“When I Kissed You”

I taste your lips, sweet as nectar, of morning dew on honeysuckle blossoms. Nibbling on your neck, tender as a new born baby’s skin, you sigh. Holding your breasts in my hands; soft, smooth as velvet, gently sucking your nipples, your hands touch my face. Tongue flicking nipples, growing ever so hard. Tongue slowly moving down your stomach, circling then plunging into your naval, you take a deep breath.        

                     

Moving downward to the crease of your leg, my tongue tracing the valley repeatedly, your legs open freely. Crossing over to the other side, tongue gently brushing your mound as it passes. Your body rising trying to hasten my play. My tongue traces the valley of your leg, you pull me to your mound, I resist feeling the passion grow. I hear you moan and your body trembles as I gently suck your love button, massaging it with my tongue.

 

You sigh as I move down to hidden treasures I know lie below. My hands part you revealing the inner lips, gateway to heavens within. Your body thrashing, you gasp as I suck the lips into my mouth. You whimper as my tongue teases, my hot breath against your flesh. My hands under you, you rise pulling me closer trying to force me inside.                                                                            

My tongue parts your lips, plunging deep within, you cry out. Your body quivers as I pleasure you again and again. As the sun, the moon, and the stars explode in ecstasy, you scream. A scream that only a lover knows is of pleasure, not from pain. I taste your hot molten lava of love which flows freely, silky, sweet nectar of the gods. 

                                                                                                                        You sigh as your body relaxes my tongue moving up to your button once more. Your body tightens; your legs close as you softly say, no more, no more. I hold you close, nothing to be said, as we know a perfect moment shared, was that of pure love. And I held you.

"When I Kissed You"  

 

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By ~ Maxboy ~ age 65
Background By ~ Little Eagle



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  • cybilseyes silver member
    July 4
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    very erotic write.. a vivd image dances in the shadows of my mind wonderful!
    Cyb


    • Maxboy gold member
      July 10
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      Thank you so much for your great comment, I am very happy you enjoyed my write.


  • The detail in this poem is fantastic. It truly is extremely sensual

    Favorite lines
    "You sigh as I move down to hidden treasures I know lie below. My hands part you revealing the inner lips, gateway to heavens within."
    ~Serenity


    • Maxboy gold member
      July 8
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      Thank you so much for your beautiful comment, I am very happy you enjoyed my write.



  • Ice Queen
    June 21

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    Very nice, I love it and it did turn me on. Good job, good luck and thanks for entering.


    • Maxboy gold member
      June 29
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.


  • this is fantastic
    the detail and depth of it all is truly wonderful. x


    • Maxboy gold member
      June 2
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.


  • this is absolutly amazing, thanx for sharing with me!


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 18
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      Thank you very much for your great comment, I am happy you enjoyed my write.



  • dutch2lips gold member
    April 30

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    ah yes, i remember this write from a previous contest of mine, remains a great read!
    thank you for entering!


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 12
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      Thank you very much for your comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.


  • This is ever so romantic, it makes me gush and I sighed throughout


    • Maxboy gold member
      April 24
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      Thank you very much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.



  • dutch2lips gold member
    April 16
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    a very hot and sensual short story, amazing write, thank you for entering!


    • Maxboy gold member
      April 25

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      Thank you very much for the applause and your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.


  • This is absolutely a wonderful piece.
    Thanks for sharing with me.

    Good luck to you

    Passions


    • Maxboy gold member
      March 15
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      Thank you for your wonderful comment, I am happy you liked my write.


  • Great write ! Love the background, even though I don't really like Christina Aguilera...she's got a few good songs.

    I loved these lines the most!
    I hold you close, nothing to be said, as we know a perfect moment shared, was that of pure love. And I held you.

    "When I Kissed You"

    Thanks for sharing.

    • Maxboy gold member
      March 5
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write. This may come as a shock to you, but I didn't select the background because of her music.



  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    January 14

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    Wow is right, thank you for your most intensely beautiful entry, is it hot in here? Lol, good luck in my contest, Josie


    • Maxboy gold member
      January 14
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.



  • XInsanity-FairX
    January 3

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    wow, this piece is just stunningy beautifull, it nearly made me cry lol, as well as being a very sensual, arousing poem
    good work
    well done, thanks for entering and good luck
    xxxx
    =]


    • Maxboy gold member
      January 3
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      Thank you very much for the wonderful comment, I am very happy you enjoyed my write.



  • doolie gold member
    December 23, 2008
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    Wow Love it. Of course it has special meaning for me.


    • Maxboy gold member
      December 23, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment sweetie, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.

      Love Ya

  • The D O M
    December 22, 2008
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    This is very hot but I did specify poetry not prose and this certainly reads more like prose to me.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    Wow. This piece couldn't be any better than it already is! It's hot, seductive, totally and completely arousing!!! And trust me.....Your age has nothing to do with your abilities! I love older men. My husband is 14 years older than I am. And my cyber gigolo is in his 60's. Thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest!

    • Maxboy gold member
      December 10, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, I am very pleased you enjoyed my write. My best wishes to you in your search, I am in hopes I may be of help.




  • Angels Whispers gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    SIZZLES


    Hello Sweetness, many hugs and kisses to you.
    Well sweetness, you certainly had my heart pounding while reading your words.
    Very well written. Stimulating and so descriptive of the need and desire within you.
    Your poem was beautiful! I love a good sensual read. It's not over the top, but beautifully done in a great and wonderful taste. Just gives me the warms tingles just reading this
    This poem bleeds passion.. and that is both something I can relate to and revel in.. every word dragged me in further..
    Searing heat...beyond the normal verse that speaks of passion, you scream out REAL passion...hunger that is insatiable...My God, you take my breath away with your words...time for a cold shower....
    I wish you all the best in the contest my sweetness.
    Much love always...
    Your loving Angel


    • Maxboy gold member
      December 10, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your beautiful comment sweetie, your words mean a great deal to me, coming from one that writes such wonderful and sensual treats to the senses as you do. I am so pleased you enjoyed my write.



  • hotchocolate gold member
    December 7, 2008

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    WOW!!! I love this from you and I'm sure she will to! Great one here hon


    • Maxboy gold member
      December 7, 2008
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      Thank you sweet candy girl, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.



  • penman gold member
    December 3, 2008
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    Excellent

    What a very passionate write and congratulations on all the trophies. They are well deserved.

    • Maxboy gold member
      December 3, 2008
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      Thank you so much for all your kind words, they are very much appreciated, coming from such an accomplished writer.


  • Zenda-Lokki gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    Great write but I didnt see what option you pickd for my contest. Congrats on all the trophies x Good luck


  • Vars
    December 2, 2008

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    good job! i like this poem a lot.
    i hope you do well in the contest,
    thanks for entering!

    xD


    • Maxboy gold member
      December 2, 2008
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      Thank you very much for your wonderful comment.


  • teen poeticsoul
    November 29, 2008

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    I really loved this piece. After reading the title I wasn't expecting what I received and It was a nice surprise. This was a great write and I'm very glad I took the time to stop by.

    • Maxboy gold member
      November 29, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the applause and your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write and that it was a pleasant surprise for you.



  • leander Moderators member
    November 9, 2008

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    Hmm, I wasn't really looking for prose here but I took the change you threw me to read this and I have to say I pretty like it.

    Thanks for entering!
    Leander


    • Maxboy gold member
      November 9, 2008
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      Thank you for the very nice comment, I am happy you liked my write.

  • mz.butter
    October 31, 2008
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    this is good writing

    good visualization.


    • Maxboy gold member
      October 31, 2008
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      Thank you very much for the wonderful comment.


  • Ziola
    October 30, 2008
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    very vivid... i enjoyed this one very much. very sensual. its every womens dream


    • Maxboy gold member
      October 30, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.



  • fairytalelovestory
    October 14, 2008
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    ty for entering good luck


  • November-Dani
    October 11, 2008
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    Very well done. So sensual yet hot. Great stuff. It deserves the trophies.
    Dani.

    • Maxboy gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      !!! WOW !!!

      Thank you so very much for the Gold Trophy, I am excited that you enjoyed my write that much.

      Thank You Again
      Don

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    Oh wow this is just amazing as shown by the many trophys it has recieved thanks for your entry into my contest best wishes and much luck


    • Maxboy gold member
      October 10, 2008
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      Thank you for your amazing comment.

      Don


  • Angelflower
    October 7, 2008

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    OMG! this was really wonderful! I love it!!! Thank you very much for sharing this! It very much deserved all those trophies!!! Best of luck in the contest.

    Angel


    • Maxboy gold member
      October 7, 2008
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      Thank you so much, I am pleased you enjoyed it.

      Don


  • Blooming Poet
    September 27, 2008
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    83.1


  • jcat gold member
    September 14, 2008
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    ......


    • Maxboy gold member
      September 14, 2008
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      Thank you for the clappies. I will take that as your approval.

      Thanks
      Don


      • jcat gold member
        September 14, 2008
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        Thank you for entering!!! This was incredibly HOT!!!


        • Maxboy gold member
          September 14, 2008
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          Thank you for your wonderful words.

          Don


  • Wulf-Eyez De Winter gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    Whoa...this is a very very good poem...thank you for entering it

    *blushes deeply* very well written


    • Maxboy gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Thank you very much, I am happy you like my poem.

      Don


  • mysticstorm gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    WOW! This is beautiful and sensual...so very soft yet such strong imagery...I can say for sure it is very tasteful erotic which turned the heat up here and turned me on...really well written...I am truly in love with this write...thanks for the impression and feelings.

    mystic


    • Maxboy gold member
      September 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the applause and your beautiful comments.

      I am pleased you enjoyed my write.

      Love
      Don


  • Butterfly.Wingz
    September 12, 2008
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    lol very funny hun

  • Butterfly.Wingz
    September 11, 2008

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    wow I am so turned on right now honestly..amazing some of the best erotica I've read... reminds me of my ex and our love making!!!!! your woman is one lucky girl. good luck and thanks for entering...

    but i would make the font a bit smaller to show the structure more acurately.....

    xoxox
    Tasha

    • Maxboy gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the Gold Trophy, I am very pleased you enjoyed my write so much. I took your advice and ah-hum made it smaller for you. hahaha[the font].

      Thank you again and you have a wonderful day, you have made mine.

    • Maxboy gold member
      September 11, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the oh so wonderful comment.

      A woman asking me for something smaller, Hmmmm. hahaha Sorry, I couldn't resist.

      Thanks
      Don


  • nevadapoet
    September 6, 2008

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    What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
    Nevadapoet


    • Maxboy gold member
      September 8, 2008
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      Thank you for the applause and great comment.

      Thanks Again
      Don

  • shaunna26
    August 28, 2008

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    wow

    Hi G-Pa,
    I don't know what to say. This blew me away. I look forward to reading more of your work.
    I miss you and love you.
    Shaunna

    • Maxboy gold member
      August 28, 2008
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      Thank you Shaunna for the comment.

      Sorry to have shocked you with this one. I should have warned you to close one eye before reading this.

      None of the others have this Erotic rating, so I hope you enjoy them.

      Love You
      G-Pa


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    This is a beautifully sensual piece, but more prose-ish than poem. I like the visuals, well done and best to you


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 28, 2008
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      Thank you very much for the comment.

      Don


  • PrInCeSs AnAsTaCiA
    August 23, 2008
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    good work.. thanks for entering good luck


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 23, 2008
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      Thank you for your wonderful comment.

      Don


  • eightball666
    August 21, 2008

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    Very good erotica my friend. Good job and good luck.


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 21, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the very nice comment.

      Don


  • Blissfullhatred silver member
    August 20, 2008
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    Damn....
    Billy's Baby


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 20, 2008
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      Thank you for the comment and applause, That is a very nice complement.

      Thanks Again
      Don


  • Childofserenity
    August 20, 2008

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    its a well balanced poem. and very sexy. Thank you so much for that entery.
    Ps. - "I taste your hot molten lava of love which flows freely, silky, sweet nectar of the gods. " amazing line!


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 20, 2008
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      Thank you for the wonderful comment, I am very happy you enjoyed it.

      Thanks Again
      Don

  • broken spirits
    August 19, 2008
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    Hot!

    How very steamy, WOW! I didn't know this place did this, very nice.


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 20, 2008
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      Thank you very much for the comment.

      I am very pleased you liked my poem.

      Thanks Again
      Don


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    hmmm such a hot and loving kiss you have there
    I love it my dear friend, this is one that is
    as smooth as silk and tells its own tale as you
    have it here.

    Riftkin


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 17, 2008
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      Thank you love, for your wonderful comment and applause.

      I'm happy you liked it.

      Love
      Don


  • Desire gold member
    August 15, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: "When I Kissed You"
    This piece tugged hard and awakened everything dormant While I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: my tongue tracing the valley repeatedly-very unique reference 'valley' which brought a smile- also a passionate feel overall- It could be just me- what I noticed and I don't like to butcher another person's work- Your piece could actually be in paragraph form or in stanzas etc- I'm not a poetic guru and will never claim to be- this is just a personal note: Some points in the piece moved faster than others- I was thinking it possibly was the way the lines were set up in succession- in some areas- felt I missed something and went back to read again; hopefully that makes sense but know I sure did enjoy the read I'm not picky whether there is punctuation or not as long as I don't get lost in the words and lose my place~Everybody has his or her own style preference so I take that in consideration I won't write a novel of a comment this time but in summary
    Congratulations on Your awards also~
    Magnificent pre-write entered ~
    Challenge Matrix:
    spelling/grammar/punctuation-18
    presentation/creativity-18
    how well you handled the challenge-20
    "grab me" effect (how much did we enjoy reading this piece)-20
    overall-20
    For a total of 96 points
    Sensual images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Hope to read more...
    Best wishes to You in the challenge Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~

    • Maxboy gold member
      August 23, 2008
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      Thank you for the applause and the most in depth comment I have ever received.

      I am very happy you were pleased with my first and only erotic write.

      Thanks Again
      Love
      Don


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Woah this was HOTT! Passionately sensual & beautifully written. Loved this!! Imagery is explosive!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck

    • Maxboy gold member
      August 14, 2008
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      <

      Thank you so much for the Honorable Mention, it means a great deal to me. I am very pleased you liked my poem.

      Thank you for the contest.
      Love
      Don


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    August 14, 2008

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    That was some kiss....

    Great job with this. I enjoyed the write, although it seemed as if this flowed a bit fast.

    **Master Ktulu**


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 23, 2008
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      Thank you for the comment and for a chance in your challenge.


  • tanzanite
    August 13, 2008

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    It definitely is hot. I liked the way you wrote this. The imagery was strong. Oral sex deserves a little bit more attention when it comes to erotica and you made me see it. Well done on that.


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your great comment, I do really appreciate it.

      Thank You
      Don


  • shimmer
    August 12, 2008
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    WOW this was a kiss to say the least. you describe the actions very well.


    • Maxboy gold member
      August 12, 2008
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      Thank you very much for the wonderful comment.

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