Oh ! Clouds up there on high
Why do you always cry
Why do you weep all summer long
Till winter’s almost nigh
You blot out all the sunshine
Till we forget the sky is blue
And waterlog our lovely parks
All this is down to you
Some say that there’s a positive
You make the crops grow too
But you leave the farmers little time
When the harvest’s due
Some say you make the gardens grow
Make flowers grow from seeds
But most of gardner’s time is spent
Pulling up your weeds
Now if we lived in Africa
The sky is always blue
The sun shines all day from dawn till dusk
And not a cloud in view
The ground is scorched, dry as a bone
The crops are dried up too
I think I’ll take back what I said
We need a friend like you..
A contest entry
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1750 points, ended July 25, 2008, 14 entries
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Comments
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:-) Nice turn the poem takes in the end, how the person wishes for always sunny skies but then retracts when they think of the implications. Thanks for sharing this poem and good luck in the contest.
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very nice poem, I enjoyed reading this. The first two verses don't seem to fight with eachother. First its viewed as weeping then is subtly painted as the enemy.
I like what you've written.
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true, we suffer due to scarcity of water. Nice poem bringing out reality..best of luck in the contest.
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Like the use of personification established straight away though I'm not oversure of the archaism of 'nigh'. Great last line though, it really encapsulates the relationship between humanity and nature. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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sassykitty
Many thanks for your kind comments on "The Clouds"
regarding the use of the "archaism" nigh it appears in
"Collins English Dictionary" published in 2005. Glad you like the poem. Best Wishes and Kind Regards George
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Hehe.. Very cute poem. I like it very much. You really had me going the whole poem. Wonderful imagery. Thanks so much for this. BEST of luck in my contest.
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ohhh, the place to be when life is busy,take the time and say what ya think, nice thoughts,keep penning and thank you for this cute entry..
Lin
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Hehehehe...funny end.nice poem.I liked it alot especially the rhyme of the first few lines.I hope you enjoyed your chat with the clouds lol
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Nice poem, good luck in the contest!
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