it is the fresh dawn
the initial illumine of
the jack-o'-lantern
approaching the terra firma
brushing this and embracing that
connecting the whole
as companionable to everyone
stimulating us for unity
Author notes
A contest entry
- Gibran Khalil Gibran ~ by Amarige.
800 points, ended July 27, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Morning Poems by Simply Olivia.
525 points, ended October 24, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very Good! Thank you for sharing this poem.
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The feeling of unity
has been sensitively portrayed in this poem. There is togetherness that springs from the well. Congrats with the HM. Frans
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to the point
almost native american and that's good, i like it -
great poem ,thank you so so much for commenting mine, i like the word usage in this very much. =) very smooth and stunningly perfect.
it is the fresh dawn
the initial illumine of
the jack-o'-lantern
great beggining! -
Again another stunning piece..Thank you my friend and best of luck
Ruby
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We are all connected
Something I have always believed. Beautiful poem!
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I find this a write of motherly love...of one bringing light, warmth and comfort...brushing her 'hands' across the waiting brow of her children, 'stimulating' the unity of love within each small soul...it is the Spirit of Creator's Love that I feel in these words...beautifully written...like warm sunlight upon my face, and I drink them in. Best wishes in the contest. Peace always, Rhonda
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Sweet simple delight, once again you never fail to amaze me with intricate selection of words...your soul flows through your heart. "fresh dawn" and "initial illumine" so refreshingly majestic as the awe of the morning sun and "of the jack-o'-lantern" tickles the youthful eye in us all and then to follow up with "approaching" taking us on the rise "terra firma" so intelligent, so passionate..."connecting the whole" truly inspiring and filling the depths of darkness, vastness, or plainness nomatter where we are at with loving joy. Ahh fine job my friend, very fine!!
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It has been too long... Reading you again has been like drinking fresh clean water. Love, Lane
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Bizarre
what an intriguing concept in unity.
The fusion of light in its emerging
parts as an illuminating family of stimuli.
nicely done
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