Born by
a woman
who fell,
but I
but I
will not.
Author notes
Born by a woman who fell, but I will not do the same mistake and fall.
A contest entry
- Describe yourself in ten simple words (and again hehe) by Noir mariposa...x.
1800 points, ended July 23, 2008, 46 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a great stand to say I will be better than my circumstances, I am amazed at how you crammed so much power into these few words, best to you
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Wow, so much emotion and layering in this
Sounds like my mummy actually
She refused too be like my nan... but I refuse too be like her.
Nicely penned ^^
Thank you for taking the time too enter my contest!
I wish you the best of luck,
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Hehe, 'aint it always like that
My mother refused to be like her mother so yeah, a whole generation of refusal.
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Oooo... I really like this. I t has so much imagry and emotions you can't help but that it in.
A wonderful write and I wish you all the best in this contest.
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Excellent
This says a lot in so few words. It is a powerful statement that also shows it can be very harmful to drink whilst expecting. It is good to see you understand what it can do to the unborn Excellent write Brian.
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I didn't even need the explaination in your author notes...you did a great job on this piece. I like it a lot Good Luck
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