orb rises in morn
casts pastel hues to adorn
rainbows in my room
Words: K.Botka
7/19/08
Author notes
Genesis 1:5 And Elohim called the light Day, and the darkness He called Night.
14 And Elohim said, Let there be lights in the firmament of the heaven to divide the day from the night; and let them be for signs, and for seasons, and for days, and years:
15 And let them be for lights in the firmament of the heaven to give light upon the earth: and it was so.
16 And Elohim made two great lights; the greater light to rule the day, and the lesser light to rule the night: he made the stars also.
17 And Elohim set them in the firmament of the heaven to give light upon the earth,
18 And to rule over the day and over the night, and to divide the light from the darkness: and Elohim saw that it was good.
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Comments
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orb rises in morn
casts pastel hues to adorn
rainbows in my room
This is a very pretty haiku that could use some fine tuning. L1: define what orb is, since it could mean a multitude of objects and is obscure in your haiku.
sunrise
casts pastel hues
rainbows on the wall
Or along the lines of your author's notes:
sunrise
over the water
....
with an image that your perceive.
You may revise until the end of the contest or a little after, thank you so much.
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Very beautiful!
A moment that many poeple no longer see. Catching the unique is the way of the poet.
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