Alters taken over in my mind
Darkness has started surrounding me
The way out I can not find
My eyes are open but still I can not see
I use to run this place
Even if I did not do so well
But it's dark and I see a different face
Of who it is I can not tell
Times have changed and I dont know where I belong
But I know I'll be lost forever before too long
Author notes
Prompt : "It's about realizing, painfully, you've kept that voice inside yourself, locked away from even yourself. And you step back and see that your jailer has changed faces. You realize you've become your own jailer." Tori Amos
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A contest entry
- Quickie: Quote Prompt Posted by Starz of Heaven.
550 points, ended July 19, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
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Congratulations on the silver cup. It is well deserved. The sense of loss is well expressed. Great Job.
Mike -
WOW!!! What a great job you did on this one! Excellent take on the prompt! I love it!
Congrats on the Silver! You deserve it!
and love
Nyetta
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I really love your take on the prompt, you have a perfect balance of the desperation and recognition that it could be changed. Congrats on the silver, great write!
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whisper
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thank you so much...... hugs.......
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First off congrats on your silver!
Secondly, I can so relate to how you feel in this piece. I hate that feeling of not belonging, and being lost. I believe that everyone has felt this at some point in their life.
Well done.
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thanks... yes
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That prompt really speaks to me, as does your poem! It's like that for many! Well done on the Silver hun!
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tahnk you for your commment .... i knew youd be the one to know......
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Oh gosh I can realte to this I feel like this alot not bale to control anything in my life anymore thank you for taking the time to enter my contest best wishes and much luck
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thank you for the silver and holding the contest and sorry you have to relate to this poem... hugs
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