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I Won't Choose

Distance between us when we were so close.
The pain is so deep as I suffer the loss.
Best friends we were before he came.
Since then nothing has been the same.

I want to talk to you as you are standing over there.
But the fear keeps on telling me that you don't care.
The silence is killing me. It's just too loud.
It's like a soft song being sung by a very large crowd.

A prayer comes to my spirit hoping that you will forgive.
I never wanted to hurt you as long as I live.
But he wanted me and I didn't think you'd mind.
Especially, since you're the one who left him behind.

You told me that you only felt sorry for him.
And that the fling was just something done on a whim.
But when I looked at him, I saw his heart breaking
just as for so long my own heart was aching.

He looked at me, too. And something in me broke free.
It was instantly love as if we were meant to be.
I love him so much and he loves me, too.
But I also love you and don't know what to do.

Still I just can't let him go and I hope you'll understand.
He is my beach and I am his sand. We go together hand in hand.
I hope that you won't make me choose between my lover and best friend.
Because I will love you both until this life comes to an end.

As I sit here just hoping that you'll just look my way,
I struggle trying to find the right words to say.

Fear won't let me come over there because I know you're mad.
But you're still my best friend and he's everything I never had.

I WON'T CHOOSE!

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  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    A great use of the prompt, a position none of us like to find ourselves in but I think we all do at some point in life.

    'I hope that you won't make me choose between my lover and best friend.
    Because I will love you both until this life comes to an end.'

    doesn't that just say it all!

    Thank you for sharing with us

    Jem and Ju






  • breedluv gold member
    July 30, 2008
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    This is a very effective and intelligent poem. I really enjoyed reading it!


  • HoneyFire
    July 22, 2008
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    OH MY GOSH!

    You are out of it sista!
    you expressed yourself so clearly here.
    there are tons and tons of ppl who go throuugh this same situation. I c ur a awesome soul with such a big heart full of love and honor.
    This poem right here...is a spotlight billboard.
    MAD TALENT...MAD TALENT
    Hope the contest goes well


  • Walking shadow
    July 22, 2008

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    I been caught in the middle like this before

    I was engaged to someone for two years. I met a new friend. We became best friends. I discovered my X was the very jealous type and I was forced to break off the engagement.
    What hurts even more is she was so controlling. I never wanted to end it that way. My X never gave me back the ring so that tells me she is still interested. We talked even as friends. But it never is the same.
    I discovered my so called best friend was lying to me to try and put a wedge between me and my X. I needed to learn that on my own and not have someone interfere in the relationship. But it is too late now. I know I could not go back with my X and I sure do not want to be around that so called friend I had either.
    She has a guy anyway. Why would she do that time?
    We sometimes get caught in the middle. I love both of them despite the trouble they both are. I just stay away form them and keep them from each other because they will fight. Sad world when I wish everyone would just be friends and not take everything so personal.


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    Oh, i really love this one. it is sad but the narritor stays strong to her postition. such a hard thing to go through. most of the time when we chose boyfriends over friends it's just the wrong thing to do...but this poem presents a different situation. that this is true love! and she can't just let him go. I really enjoyed this poem. so strong and true ...and the rhyme is perfect...its not overdone or underdone - if thats even a word...lol. and to tell you the truth there is no awkward areas...tho, personally, i don't think you need the last three words in the poem. you present that so clearly in the poem...that you don't need it at the end...but thats just my opinion.
    anyway, I love this and i wish you luck in the contest


    • Kim
      July 20, 2008
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      Thank you so much. It is always a pleasure hearing from your peers. You are so right...life sometimes places us in situation with hard decisions to make. But the key is the make the best decision for your life.

  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    July 19, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry, good luck!

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