The root of evil, child of jest
Black darkness, Satan's nest
A world encased in dark black stone
I'm the killer, all alone
Stalking, hunting, full of rage
People are the puppets
The street is their stage
I play the game I know so well
I'll make your life a living hell,
I cherish the thought for you to be gone
I am the King, you are the pawn
Thinking thoughts of what could be
A paradox, in irony
You are my prisoner, also my slave
It's the Killing Hour
You must behave
Let you feel the searing pain
I am innocent, just insane
Can't lose my grip, let it slip
I'll keep control put on a show
The Killing Hour
You will never know
Evil visions, hellish revelations
Invitations from down below
It's there someday my shattered mind will go
Rational and dreaming states
Already hard to separate
Soon all thoughts together run
It's the Killing Hour
Evil has won
As I step outside it's death I smell
But in my mind I reside
In hell~
Author notes
Okay I know you all are going gee whiz lol but I am reading a book about a serial killer and profilers thus the muse lol
And lol yes I am okay just something a lil different
Hope you all like
Written January 8th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Dark poems by XXxdarkangelXxX.
300 points, ended October 11, 2005, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wow this was awsome and i also liked the pic
great job
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wow this was awsome
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amazing poem, it was so descriptive and the pic went with the poem very well i loved it!!! ~Lara
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What I saw in this piece is an old witch that is about to reek havic on the world. I liked it, would make a great little story in a ghost story book.
Lady Raven -
This one is way better Susan~I love this and I remember reading this before~LOL
I was like
I knew I had read this before~
Great piece and it does raise a hair on the flesh
Best wishes to you in the contest sweetie~
Big hugs
and much love~Desire
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Wow, that was intense. Kinda makes you shiver. The pic was absolutely incredible. I loved it. Great job and good luck.
Hugs and bites, Lady Raven -
WOW..this is something else.
EErie...frightening...and extremely well done.
Not my normal read, but I enjoyed this.
Sam
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Interesting
As my brother would say "This write is Wicked Cool" I liek it
Its funny how sometimes us poets can read or see something that will inspire us to write a totally great poem such as this 
Although its dark its very interesting. Great Job! 
---Sara
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ooooo the chills just ran up my spine and back down again.....whoo hooo! I love reading poems that make my skin crawl with goosebumps...very erie. You have given life amoung the thought of death....very powerful. You go girl!
~~Jenn -
Hey, thanks for taking a look at my poem The Dead Trees, it meant a lot to me
WOW. This, the entire thing, the flow, the rhyme to it, the feel of it, the way you wrote it, everything..its just amazing! Just from this one poem I can tell that you have true talent at writing. Really really nice job, awesome job here. I enjoyed it a lot, very well written peice!! Thanks for sharing.
~*~blessings~*~
~rora -
Very different tha your usual writes. i'm not really a big fan of horrors, but this one is so very well written, and very creepy too! That is what a horror must be, creepy, you have succeeded on giving the chills!
Mari
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Man..I need a book like that! QUITE the muse it was for you I'd say. Very descriptive, the details made it very easy to visualize, thusly having good imagery too. I can see why it's such a popular poem. The pic and background were good too. The pic especially something about it..so weird..the head looks like its moving..anyways..Very nice write here, ok nice is a dumb word for a horror poem, isn't it? A very horrific write!!!
lol
Crystal -
Woot woot~I love it and I can see serial killer all over the page~Watching!Coveting~The pic is delicious~Gives the edge and YOU did an awesome job on this piece Susan~Love it Big hugs and much love~Desire
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I really like this..a lot different than what you normally write..but we could all use a change once in a while, thats what puts the spice in life Dark and dreary i found this one to be..goes great with the pic to. You have such an outward look on life, showing both the faithful side and the darker side full of meaning and purpose. Kind of like two opposite roads meeting ya know: I felt a sense of control in this poem..as if someone is struggling..wanting to know when there life will come to an end. but thats one of the greatest things in life is not to know when our end is and to live each day with no regrets great write as usual!
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sitting here with goosebumps
and it isn't from the cold!
didn't know you had this in you susan
serial killers you say...scary stuff
one of the reasons i keep coming back to read your newest pieces
i never know what to expect
nature, love, vampires, history
and now this!
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Uber good
Wow that reminded me of a book I read once called Hideaway by Dean koontz... That poem was really good. I mean uber -
Very different voice for you, but one you handled very well. It flows along beautifully in a creepy fashion...It really pulls you in till the last word. It's strange sometimes where the muse comes from, I for one never know when inspiriation will hit for from what source...this is very well done...but as I said, creepy. I think you delved into the mind of a killer pretty well honestly...not a place one tends to go often I would think...bravo...hugs, Rom
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This was amazing!! Your talents really are neverending, huh??
I adored the rhyming scheme, it was perfect and the images used were so grasping, I felt reluctantly pulled in to the mind of the character on show. Like I was caught in some sck and twisted play.
I loved the contradictory nature of the character and the way he played people. The following section really pulled me:
Stalking, hunting, full of rage
People are the puppets
The street is their stage
Like a game playing out for his entertainment, using people as pawns in a deadly game of chess with false smiles while he is seething on the inside.
Just awesome stuff and a far cry from your softer writes. You have such a range of talent. I am extremely impressed.
Good luck with it all, sweetie. You deserve to go far.
Much Love,
Nate.
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Good Gosh Susan!
What lurks within the hidden mind
Where nothing known alone will find
Incased in darkness, no light dwells there
A hell all it's own in deep despair
reading such things can make a mind conjur up some pretty horrific stuffage..and your mind set forth one deep,dark,creepy...pretty damn awesome write...i love it! BRAVO!
love ya much
~Pamela -
Blushfulmoon Muppet. Nopey, ole Lute can't wrap around this tune coming from all dat sweetness. Bust my bubble. Evverbody so darn complicated. Next, Judas denied will write about red ballons and cotton candy.
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Susan
This is very dark, and yes, amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The picture kinna scared me
, I don't know how you read those books, I don't think I would sleep very well
You're still a beautiful poetess
Love you,
Karen
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this is an amazing write... you have much talent... i love your topic and your idea on what this poems should say... i liked your use of words and how you put everything together so well.. very dark and morbid.. i am so adding you to my fav.s... darkness rocks... Later Scar
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Very nice I loved this, it was dark, well-described, and the words flowed and rhymed beautifully. Very well written.
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Very dark Susan! I loved the opening lines... definitely moved smoothly throughout. Not sure I would say keep on reading that book..LOL....but your muse certainly brought the darkside of you.
Excellent...I love it when we are challenged by our muse to go someplace a bit different for us!
Well done!
hugs...gotta run...i'm late for work!
Mary ann -
wow this was very very very good
the flow to it just how you worded it
an made it rhyme so well its great an
the thrill of the write it kicked ass
you did a fantastic job this was truly
an awesome write good job keep it up
~Jen~ -
awesome
wow this is a good piece of poetry.. it flows well it enticed me to the point i was sitting on the edge of my seat wondering and waiting to see what was to come.. great job and keep up the good work -
this is a really different write....... geeez... I was expecting this at all......
Don -
I loved it!
This poem takes you into the mind of your vamp. I sincerely love the style and your choice of words. I hope to some day be as good a writer as you. -
different, yes definately! wow! what a muse your book has become...whoo hoo! but that is good....even though I think I like the nature and love poems meanings better, the intensity of this is not to be outdone. Brilliant write Susan. so vivacious and full of eerie thoughts. It kept its power throughout, yet it just sucked you in and never let you breath a moment till you were done, then it just let you go on your merry way of thinking...WOW!
you pulled out another masterpiece, no matter the style, the category, or the muse...its amazingly penned...keep it up
Much love
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hay this one is totaly different from the ones i've already read i mean it's diff from your previous styles.u r very versatile keep them comming susan!
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Hi Susan:
Nice rhythm in this poem. An excellent write and excellent choice of words to describe the anxiety of the person in this poem. Thanks. Bill -
This is a great piece, I must 'applaud' it as well. The rhythm and rhyme of the piece just move so well. And the background accentuates on the aspects of the piece. The pic I paid no mine, didn't have any relevance to me.
But, I must say, great piece.
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wow thats great~~ i love you it all just feel together not even a flaw in it. it just seemed to flow right from you to the paper or aka computer. it just went so well together this was written excellently . i love it. i was gonna pick a perfect part i liked but i love the whole thing. great job!
Pluto~N~Venus -
thanx for your comment i thought i'd take a look at you work. yes it is great i love the way you write and the topic of this poem is great as im into this sort of stuff.
keep writing
Chloe -
Oh i like it Susan .. Oh' and the first two lines just pull you
in and set the stage! Wonderful job! Woooooo Makes you look over
your shoulder hehe .. I have always loved a good serial killer movie.. Fantastic job on this Missy!! I loved it!
Much Love~ to You Susan Always~~ ~~xOx~~ ~Mina
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excellent...a bit scary
Very different for you, sweets. Your basic goodness shows through though...even though you speak as the "monster" in this piece...you foreshadow his eventual ruin and damnation. This is excellently done. There are a couple of spots where the meter is a bit off...but, I like it too much the way it is to want you to make it "perfect". Sometimes, you just have to know when to leave a good thing alone. Thanks so much for sharing this awesome piece...and hope you're enjoying that book.
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