She was all that I needed
each smile made my day worth while
I'd see her face any place I went.
Perfect eyes to lose a mind in
a nose I needed to kiss each day
and always those lips, that smile.
I don't need her any more,
can't feel anything, just get up
go to work, eat and sleep.
How I hate her, how could she do that
I wish I was dead
instead of her.
Author notes
Prompt approx 10 lines on "Love doesn't live here any more"
It is a story, not real life!!!
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A contest entry
- Quickie-PIF-10 poets- Prompt by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended July 19, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Due to circumstances within my control, I just now read this. Got the emotion dead on.
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Ohhhh ...
Good stuff.
Though that seems hardly fair.
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I liked this, a mixture between pure love at the beginning and sadness at the end. You took the prompt really well to create a great piece. Congratulations on a really good write and on your bronze.
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aww the ending was really sad!! you did a wonderful job with the prompt.. I really liked this.. congratulations on the bronze..
Angel
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I am glad you put that in your AN otherwise there was a tinge of sadness for you lol..you might want to rethink 'loose' to 'lose'
I know bones rattle but sheesh!!!
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I don't mind my setting my mind loose in a ladies eyes
But yes it was a typo!
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That last line zaps you. Good take on the prompt, good luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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