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Summer, with its bags packed,

somberly waves goodbye and I imagine

that's the way it will be

as sentiments are exchanged

 

with promise of return, as sunlight

and shades of green, slowly

drift away, replaced by

lingering chill,

 

gleaming visions of rusty orange, amber

and yellow ochre splashed across

landscape, that sighs with

the reserved humility

 

of a mother, facing another daunting task,

for this is either a season of woe,

or a magical time to show

an autumnal hospitality

 

with grateful heart n hearth, both

warm and plentiful with

spice scents wafting and merry

souls laughing

 

as right outside their windows

flora and fauna, quietly

accept without contention

the natural order,

 

understanding that all things are

cyclic, renewable and

a long sleep will do them good

till spring wakes, with a warm kiss.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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I know I know, it's not here yet, but I too enjoy Autumn, so here's my contribution and thoughts on the subject.

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  • Elisabeth Strange
    August 26, 2008
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    Beautifully done! A gold well-earned!


  • notorious gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    "Summer, with its bags packed,"
    I like the personification here.

    'somberly'<==Personally, I think this should go with "waves goodbye"

    wave's goodbye==>waves, not wave's

    "that's the way it will be"
    Now this is simply stated. I like that. It's kind of sad.

    "rusty orange"
    'rusty' doesn't sound poetic...but it does here.

    "autumnal hospitality"
    Another one I love...these 2 words are very groovy together.

    Not sure why 'spring' is capitalized in that last line...or why people capitalize seasons when they don't have to be. I don't think it merits a capitalization, but that's just me.

    Jessica


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      August 21, 2008
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      Thanks for the input Jessica, I will glean a bit of your criticism and put it to good use.


      mj.


  • cherche -d -ame
    August 12, 2008

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    as we had an almost autumnal feeling day yesterday, these are exactly the sentiments and thoughts running through my mind...an anticipation of all the sounds, scents and sights. Thank you for entering this multi-dimensional piece into the contest,
    reenie


  • Avendesora Dreamer
    July 24, 2008

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    heehee...I love autumn...it's a flash of brillance to remember when it seems that all the world is dead and though I enjoy summer, I'm never depressed to wave goodbye to it...this poem makes me wish for that color and for the return of in the heart warmth, for when autumn comes it always seems that people become summers warmth rather than winter's chill...im sorry, i ramble...but you have that effect on me, I often get a touch of your muse when I read...good luck!!!


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    Your very colourful words brought many images to mind, some happy, some not but as you say...

    with understanding that all things
    are cyclic, renewable and
    a long sleep will do them good
    till Spring wakes, with a warm kiss.

    I'm waiting for Spring with as much patience as I can muster...it's been a cold winter here.

    Best wishes in the contest dear.

    Love Margaret


  • Gwenevere
    July 19, 2008

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    It might as well be here for we in England have been lacking in sunshine this summer.Anyway, you have given us a taste of the most beautiful Golden Autumn.A real pleasure to read, Ros

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