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♥2 - Heart♥

Now my ♥heart♥ is a little
rusty.
I guess that's what happens
When it's left outside -

[exposed
to brutal ☼sunlight☼
and uncaring r
              a
            i
              n] -

Hammered full of
bright, shiney steel nails

That you put there,
sooooo
    ♥lovingly♥

Author notes

again...not trying for DP...lol...just some creative thinking

kind of helps a little if you read the first one, but I think this is the better of the 2....
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4438945

Feel free to be as critical (or not) as you like...

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  • nichtmich silver member
    July 26

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    Mercy! For 'not trying' you do a spectacular job! I like the way rain falls and the appropriate symbols, I generally don't understand dirty pretty, but this makes perfect sense. The imagery is intense, the message powerful and just amazingly good!


  • Second.Choice
    July 25

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    Wow I love this I love how you've formatted it all, it adds a real impact to yur words. Beautiful flow! Great write!
    x

  • devils angel
    July 19

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    And Again You Hav Excelled

    this is really awesum...
    you have a gr8 imagination n it shows..
    i like this very much
    keep it good, strange, authentic, n u have me intrigued for always lol