Sweet and twisted
I hold on tighter
To live longer.
In a list
A contest entry
- Describe yourself in ten simple words (and again hehe) by Noir mariposa...x.
1800 points, ended July 23, 2008, 46 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Anywho, tell me what you think...
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good work
best of luck -
Simple
the simple part of life written in a short yet very open piece. Write on young poet.
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"i hold on tighter to live long" great line! i love it... Good Luck*Rose*
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That's so cleverly written
Big applause for the originality of it ^^
finals for you hehe
Thank you for taking the time too enter;
I wish you the best of luck!
Claire x
{P.S.... FOUNDS YOU!
and nooo not being nice coz you're me aunt, I did actually like this heaps hehe}
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I loved the opening lie with the two almost contrasting adjectives. I fought that really captured how complex we can be sometimes. That line really captured my attention. I also liked the rest of the poem, i think we all know that feeling of desperatley trying to hold on. Great work, you provided a lot of insight using such few words.
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