As i sit i think a thought
A thought i like to think
If our world is as it seems
The dream worlds at its brink
The brink is near, yes not so far
Just gaze and you will see
The eye can pierce between this world
And set the spirit free
The spirit rides among the waves
The spirit sets its stride
The eyes conceal, the spirit frees
and makes the soul alive
And when it falls from its heightened tops
And lands in the world of speech
The spirit lends it essence thence
And evinces truths that seek to teach
A constant dance between the two
The seeker and its queen
The queen takes its steps and makes to move
The seeker from his dream
The queen she dances
The seeker he moves
The queen she prances
The seeker he grooves
Together they live in peace
the seeker and its royal piece
Please tell me what you think
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Nicely descriptive and I do like the way this moves along almost as if it's floating above the waves. Liked the use of verbs, they really capture a sense of movement. Technically you may want to change your I to upper case and if you're using enjambement you may still want to use some punctuation to help the flow which means you don't necessarily have to commence each line with a capital letter. Did like this and the sense of relationship is captured well and with humour. Thanks for sharing.
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Truly Magical
Wow thats fantastic! The words came alive as i was reading, i have to say its very difficult to find poetry of that quality, you obviously spend alot of time and thought on this. Well done your a great poet.
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