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Words, under the petals

 

 

I think of you, my bones soft,
my heart sings a song for you
of white and pink blossom
wet and heavy of rain
falling with the southern wind.
Rain slides down my face
finding a place to rest
in the middle of my palm.
Liquid crystals hold
the silence and whispers,
the secret of apple’s birth.

Darkness consumes the sky
competing with Genesis.
From afar, an unknown ballad,
the sound of guitar, strings crying.
Somebody tries to smith the words
and sing with complete lack of technique.

I find myself lost
within strange thoughts.
Clouds, dark flags in the sky
wave me good night
and I hear somebody call my name.
I do not turn back,
but cling to a few fragile unspoken words
hanging them to the edge of my lips as silken petals.

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Ink runs from the corners of my mouth
There is no happiness like mine.
I have been eating poetry.
~Mark Strand, "Eating Poetry," Reasons for Moving, 1968

Thanks in advance for all yours comment dear friends and poets.
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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 5, 2008

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    Yes..the language is lost..and the senses are lost..when you love..and love is in the air briniging a special communication beyond to the languages of the world..a great work indeed..

  • Time focus on Me
    August 3, 2008

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    Beautiful job..

    I find myself lost
    within strange thoughts.
    Clouds, dark flags in the sky
    wave me good night
    and I hear somebody call my name.
    I do not turn back,
    but cling to a few fragile unspoken words
    hanging them to the edge of my lips as silken petals.
    U did a wonderful and beautiful job with this poem I love all of it great job.. love the way it flowed through and through.. Keep up the beatiful job.. and keep da ink flowing. I love readin ure poetry.. once agan Great job..


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    July 20, 2008

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    "I think of you, my bones soft..." Man, incredible evocative. The metaphor is a little dificult to keep, but the message is not. Thank you so much for entering.


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    "I think of you, my bones soft"

    I love the opening lines; they immediately set the mood for what's to follow. A more melancholic write from you this time, but one that falls as softly as the petals you wrote about. Beautiful.

    ~ Nicolette


  • tara wilson gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    "but cling to a few fragile unspoken words
    hanging them to the edge of my lips as silken petals."

    This poem has a really, maybe darker? different tone than you normally write, and the imagery is a little surreal, I love it..I love the petals as unspoken words on your lips...beautiful poem.


  • Puppydog gold member
    July 19, 2008
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    LOVELY!!!!

    Oh my! Such soft and sweet lovely thoughts! Beautiful dreams indeed! ;D's

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