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Wisps of faith

Whiffs of air rolling on dry soul
cooling tears on bosom
eyes tired of midnight cascade,
flashes of hurt bolted
into silent stream of warm drops
thrashing loudly in soul.

Twittering dawn pours in yellow light,
prayers of night rehearsed,
a calm with that air pouring in
nestles in heart heavy
hope still sprouts from cracked barren land
determined to flourish.

Author notes

It is called Ballad Measure (or sometimes English Hymn Measure).
it is in alternating iambic tetrameter and termeter.
Think eight syllable and six syllable lines. Each line with a di-DUM di-DUM beat.

Thanks to cricketjeff for inspiration from his poem 'The catalyst"
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4429569


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  • PerfectImperfection
    August 19, 2008

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    Hope unfolding in the balance... Nice form here, allowing for a bit of sophistication to pour from the underlying sadness. Thoughtful and well penned. A vague extension of emotion, billowing in to reveal the bloom. Thank you for your entry!


  • Venugopal gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    Hope still there, earth turn fertile, give its bounty. If earth becomes sterile..it is catastrophy..very well written


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    I love how despite an echoing sadness in some of your poems you have that glimmer of hope!
    Beautifully done!



  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    Oh I did enjoy this piece very nice indeed your wprds as always are great thank you joining us Have a nice glass of Iced Tea and enjoy the sun


  • Aliya Abbas
    July 21, 2008
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    such a beautiful imagery. loved it. every line is special, cannot single out 1. its lovely.


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    July 20, 2008
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    Happy background

  • Aliya Abbas
    July 19, 2008
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    All the best

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