if
me
eat,
then
he
not
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need i say more?
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875 points, ended August 9, 2008, 112 entries
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Lol, ok this makes me laugh - I feel like you are speaking in cave man talk... which cracks me up first of all... Then secondly, this is so simple, yet says so much - It's amazing what you can make out of just 6 words!
"if
me
eat,
then
he
not"
Just awesome lol!!
Amber
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Cute write. Sums up what others took hundreds of pages to write in just 6 words. Best of luck in the contest.
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thanks. you know i try, it just comes naturally to me.
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Oh wow, this is freakin awesome.
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Zen Haiku, awesome!
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I don't know what you were trying to achieve here, but it rocked. Written slightly caveman-ish, but the Dr. Seuss effect of minimal words was well-done. I would suggest punctuating "not" with a period, but that's just me.
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thanks for the comment. I only wish i was half the genius seuss was. As for what i was trying to achieve, its more for my own amusement but i am always glad when other get some joy out of my work. i look foward to reading your poetry soon.
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Nice.
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why thank you
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Lol. Awesome. Possible third stanza:
If
Not eaten
Maybe sex?
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thank you. definatly worth consideration.
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lol. the simplicity of this poem, coupled with the message that it gets across, is awesome. i don't know if you were going for the humorous edge, but there's definitely a sort of acerbic side to this poem. nice job.
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thanks, there is always some humor in my poems. keeps things intreasting.
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