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Please Please Forgive Me

Please forgive me for I have sinned
Let darkness consume my soul
Eat away my heart
And attempted the unthinkable
Suicide
Every thing seems to want me dead

 

People leave me alone to die,
Let me sit by myself and cry
Every one seems to be at risk
All I ask is if anyone would care?
Should the time come at last would I be missed?
Eternity will be forgotten

Forever is a long time to wait
Or is it torture taking place?
Right of passage is what I seek
Give or take my life away
I just need some time and space
Venting now and again in a secret place
Every night I look to the stars and think

My this is a horrible place to be
Every thing is at it's end at last

Author notes

Neh, the world's gone to crap. Deal with it. Not in the best mood but still trying to get over writer's block and trying to not feel as useless as I do right now. This will be edited later

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  • MorbidDarkness
    August 3
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    aww powerful intense and sad write

  • Icethus
    July 20

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    -shrugs- I agree with you...it's a bit nonsensical and wandering. I like your other new one much better.

    • Ivy-Lee-Ellas gold member
      July 21
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      yeah this one was done out of a sense of anger and dark hate. i was annoyed. then i got over it via piano...lol
  • JaydinC
    July 19
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    Nice

    this was nicely done, deep, dark, with a hint of hate. lol
    I personally really liked it and I don't think it needs any editing at all
    my favorite lines were 'Forever is a long time to wait
    Or is it torture taking place?
    Right of passage is what I seek
    Give or take my life away'
    Heavy....good job


    • Ivy-Lee-Ellas gold member
      July 19
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      thank you kindly. and yeah, that was kinda what i was feeling at the time so i suppose it was displayed well, better than i thought apparently...
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