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Lights Out (Haiku)

thunderhead shape cloud
lightning flashes down to earth
power's off again

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  • sassykitty
    July 21, 2008

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    Wow it's amazing how so few words can really encapsulate a moment. This is so vivid and evocative and I really liked the way it turned from the natural phenomenom to an irritating part of everyday life. Your opening line is particularly effective and creates its desired imagery perfectly. Great write. I will definitely visit more of your work.
    Cheers


  • azure85 gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    thunderhead shape cloud
    lightning flashes down to earth
    power's off again

    Oh, those electrical storms! Good AHA in L3, thank you so much.