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caught, in the trap of betrayal.

your hold tightens
upon my mind.

squeezing me senseless
like the noose
slowly killing me.

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  • letters to no one
    January 9

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    "your hold tightens
    upon my mind."

    I hate when people get that power over my mind.

    But not when your poems do

    XD

    Shelly
    xxx


  • aanika
    July 29, 2008

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    ahhh.
    scary
    why
    do
    u
    do
    this
    to
    me.

    im close to tears lol
    IUNO WHATS WRONG WITH ME


  • aanika
    July 20, 2008
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    haha squeezing me senseless --> i like that


  • Grey Mouser
    July 20, 2008

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    And sensless betrayal falls to the unsuspecting mind, tightening it's grip to strangling holds. Nicely written and thanks for entering into the contest.
    Be well and be blessed,
    Mouser


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    whoa! some strong words, piercing emotions
    your word usage was great, penning such strong words in such a short length


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    WOW! strong words and emotions...I really like this piece. Good luck


  • BehindTheShadow
    July 18, 2008
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    Wonderful piece!


  • Claudia Incognito
    July 18, 2008

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    I love this. I'm officially in love with prompts, they're short...and so to the point sometimes :3 good luck in the contest

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