For now I lurk in shadows
watching you, needing you.
Believing that you’ll come save me
from the darkness,
eventually.
In a list
A contest entry
- prompt; 20 words; 10 entries by Grey Mouser.
475 points, ended July 20, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"Believing that you’ll come save me
from the darkness,
eventually."
That is so incredibly sad;
I can feel the longing.
♥
-Mary -
Believing that you’ll come save me
from the darkness,
eventually.
i like the rhyme of "me" and "eventually" & also how theres a space in between the lines cause its like suspenseful cause you're like
whats coming nextt?
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This is short and to the point. No wasted words. This is clear and meets the target mood.
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oooh scaryy.
haha i like it
again especially the last line -
the last word put an exclamation point on the whole piece.
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Holding forth to the knowledge that someday the darkness shall be lifted and light will come to shine when two find rescue. Nicely done and thanks for entering into the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser -
Nicely done in brevity...hope still wait in the shadows of darkness...well done...best to you!
mystic
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darkness filled with the mystery of hope's promises to someday bring forth into the light of wonder. well done and many blessings always xx
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a dark twist on the prompt, I love where you took this. Great write!
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:3 I like it...it's mysterious I Guess
Different. But it's a bit hard to write poems with prompts sometimes. But I do still like it no matter what
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