Oblivious to your open-minded reactions;
goodbye salutes me a hello-
while awkward distortions complement this sensation
you become my repelling charm.
Wasted momentums and rejoiced reactions-
I dare you to succumb to the taste
and leave only the bitter confliction
that for so long I tried to demonstrate.
Of all my delightful losses
you were considered the number one;
With you everything seemed too perfect-
and now it's obvious that it really was too much to give...
I'd rather chew sand than go back into the past
and dare myself to forgive your hideous flaws;
Monster, creature of the devil, you dare ruin my ceremony of true love
with plagiarism of lies and deceits fortold by you.
You're twinging my heart and devouring me whole
and yet I can't retract just to learn the fact
that all you spoke of was merely rehearsed-
Theatrical excuse to conceal away the truth..
Blasphemies, you spoke of me
treacherous words that wounded like daggers
now are the mere reason to my defeat;
all my broken flaws are now the words I know you didn't mean.
~♥~
Author notes
XXVampireeyesXX
-For All Of This, I'm Better Off Without You.
For The Amount Of Time I've Spent,
Trying For Your Heart, I Have Nothing Left To Show.
You Were My Favorite Waste Of Time.
-I'd rather chew on broken glass than
keep living in the past and waste my time
analyzing words I know you didn't mean.
Well as always I tried my best.. muse kick in so I didnt let it run off again
well enjoy!
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A contest entry
- Quote Inspired [Round 2]★ by innocence jaded.xx.
800 points, ended September 4, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Never Again Will This Hurt Me
Comments
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This is such a thoughtful piece of pain, the heart, and the past for which it stood. Angsty and poignant. Nice imagery and flow throughout.
"Oblivious to your open-minded reactions;
goodbye salutes me a hello-"
.. love those opening lines here ..
"I dare you to succumb (to) the taste
and leave only the bitter(-ness) confliction"
.. I would just say 'bitter' here for sake of the flow ..
"I'd rather chew sand then go back into the past" .. 'than' for comparison ..
"with plagiarism of lies and deceits fortelled by you"
.. 'foretold' maybe here instead? ..
Great write!
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Nice. I like this poem. I love this line:
I'd rather chew sand then go back into the past. I hope you do well in the contest.
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