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Door to nowhere

I know your watchword, all your life was "A man has to be strong!"
I know this came before ideas of what was right and wrong...
and while the fam'ly's worried because "suicide's a sin!"
I wonder, Brother, did you just find a fight you couldn't win?

I've been pulled back, myself, from that all-too-inviting door.
Is that why you could talk to me...'cause I been there before?
What could I tell you that I didn't say, back when I tried?
I wonder, Brother, d' you just find a bronc you couldn't ride?

I've got no words of judgement; who am I to say you're wrong?
I've got no condemnation, 'cause we can't always BE strong!
I wish I'd had the things you needed...wish the words could make you see
but I wonder, Brother...will you be there to lay the blame on me?

But I still miss you! 

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  • firefly53633
    August 21, 2008

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    Moving!

    Very sad this whole poem. Lament to the lost. You did your best I am sure of it my friend! He won't be blamin you in the end! Hats off to the fact that you put your hearts pain into words!


  • Misery
    August 17, 2008

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    Such a solemn poem...I am sorry you had to feel such hardship...But your words are truly beautiful... I am truly sorry though, that life had dealt you such an inspiration...Thank you for sharing.

    -Victoria


  • PurringKitten silver member
    August 7, 2008

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    SO SAD

    your words pull the tears from my heart
    we just never know the minds of those that suffer and the heart when filled with pain...

    i feel when a measure of peace has crossed ones mind. they have found something we have yet to find, so crossing over is the answer for so many

    I am so sorry for your loss

    this purring kitten sends you a hug


  • ca ne fait rien
    July 19, 2008

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    No, of course he won't blame you, and neither should you.
    The poem works well with the subject. I envy your ability to make rhyme and meter not be trite and trivial but work to emphasise the depth of emotion with understatement.

    Be well my friend- you and I know this is another bronc, another rough bit of the a bumpy journey.


    • dericlee
      July 19, 2008
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      It's sad, Stef; after spending most of our lives at odds, John and I had finally started to accept each other and get along. Now he's just...gone.

      It hurts.

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