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the Astrology of ancient texts and modern minds

 

 

 

 

 

how each star is marked
by the meanings
cast upon a paper sky,
 
by the way light
always charts a path to rise
like a hollow Jesus
pinned against a cross
of night;
 
the oracle of reason,
the holy man of faith, each as wrong
as Judas misunderstood,
eyes fixed to ideals of truth
beyond compassion,
 
those in the east come
those in the west fall
 
connecting-the-dots to mistake
each pattern for a Braille of Revelation
 
while the deepest light
weaves us, thrashes against us
empty.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Congratulations on your Gold!

    I love your subject of light and how this is written with a great quality of intrigue.
    'connecting-the-dots to mistake
    each pattern for a Braille of Revelation'

    I much like this especially the second line here. The first sticks a little with me because I don't believe there are any mistakes in this, as you say 'revelation'. Yes, I suppose you may mean our own interpretation in connection, in which case subjective 'mistake' yes, otherwise no, impossible.

    'while the deepest light
    weaves us, thrashes against us
    empty.'

    This is the most intriguing part for me... 'deepest light'-
    I read: Always present, unseen, un-refracted and Whole, always being what it is, non-particularised so 'empty' of 'things'.

    Well done, I enjoyed and thank you.

    Sol


  • Rowan gold member
    July 19

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    I never have anything useful to say about your work, my only small nit would be 'paper sky' I don't know, I think it's been used a time or two. Could be me.
    Other than that, this is the quality of work I'm looking for in this contest, a deep muse.
    Thank you for entering this hon, overwhelmed.


  • evil tempest
    July 19
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    i would too


  • Jaden silver member
    July 18
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    Cool, cool poem . . . you're the bomb!

    Incidently, I just wrote an astrology poem . . .


  • JezIsaRos
    July 18

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    True art of feeling and light...a beautiful poem of much contemplation and eloquence. It speaks for itself.

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    July 18
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    If I could write the stars like this, I would.

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