The bow danced...
his fingers
alternating into pizzicato
then reaching a frenetic pace
as he smoothly went into Martele'
Then ascending into full Tremelo
The handsome, energized vampire
lost in
an ancient gypsy beat.
The strings vibrated to a love
that had died centuries ago
of a fair lass with red hair
and puffy skirts
and full bodice
with a gentle smile
that even now could thaw
the heart of an undead.
the bow flew...vibrato
as she danced in his head
her skirts flowing
arms outstretched
singing a favorite folk song.
The crowd hypnotized by one
so lost in the moment
as she shared her love of life
in music and dance.
A cold heart remembers well
the taste of her lips.
The softness
pressed against his length
and living
in this moment with her
Raising himself to a fever pitch
he hits his crescendo
of musical madness,
and knows the lost feeling
of no longer being able
to feel the sadness...
of memories that died with her.
In a list
A contest entry
- ~Wounded Violin~ Dark Photo Prompt Contest by Sanguinarius.
700 points, ended August 27, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
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1000 points, ended September 2, 2008, 31 entries
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450 points, ended September 22, 2008, 10 entries
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452 points, ended October 13, 2008, 10 entries
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430 points, ended October 29, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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A nice poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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nice. i like it.
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Wow this is beauty within a darkness. Amazing peice. Loved it.
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Well this really is quite the piece, has a superb flow and great tempo while reading. A pure delight for me, great work. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Much has already been said of this poem
The pace built up with the music which enhanced the experience further for the reader. The descriptive imagery and good word selection skill kept the flow moving in this well crafted poem.
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Beautifully poignant! Great job and I stand and bow to you for this gift. Please keep it flowing.
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I liked how your words seemed to dance here. Very clever and very well done.
Your descriptive words allowed images to unfold with ones mind as this is read. Bravo!
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Amazing. . .
A antagonizing write, was very beautiful. I liked how your placed the music and the story as one. I play viola and I loved picturing the words. Well Done
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awwwwww i love the imagiry here , very beutyful and ingageing i love it!
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This is a true fiddle piece! I love the image and sense of dark fantasy in it. I really loved the knowledge of violin techniques used in it. Pizzacato and tremelo...both very fun things to do. Well, I have the red hair and the fiddle...no bodice though, haha!
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I can see this scene unfolding in my mind and I find myself really identifying with the vampire and his lost love. May I say there is a sweetness in his poignant remembering of her? It really held my attention and I felt the potential for more writes to delve further into the story. Really lovely.
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Wow, there isn't very much structure to the poem, but the content is amazing. I play violin and adore the darker side of the world, and I think you painted this picture amazingly, my emotions are so in-tune with this one. I adore this poem one of my fav's overall. Great work darlin.
~kitty xxx~
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This reminded me of the movie Queen of the Damned and Lestat and his memories with the violin. Great job thank you for entering. ~Chelsey
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I haven't commented on this one before but I've read it many times and I keep coming back to read it even the title is perfection. Just had to though because I'm reading it again *S*
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This truly a GOLDEN write....I love the direct approach he had to the music he enjoyed as well as the style; classical...which I enjoy myself......wine, candlelight and song...excellent talent at work here again...write on!...novy
Your imagery has no bounds
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I Can See Why This Won Two Golds, Congrads...
This poem does involve the emotions of love lost very well. I enjoyed this poem immensely...not just for the emotions but the feelings, the truth in the write. I think the "and knows the lost feeling...being able to feel the sadness" could be combined into one stanza, and the last line can stand alone. Other than that, I applaud this write.
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omg...love this...lol.
congrats!
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thumbs up
shivers and strings
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So prett
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Wonderful Write. Reminds me of the show Queen of the DAmned. Where Lestate became enamoured of the young gypsy girl.
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wow so beutiful and dark i love it vampires are kool
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beautiful!!
being a composer, i loved it!
ing with daggers,
Mylee -
Okay, I'm stunned. That was. . .I don't even know what it was. So beautifully dark, so haunting, so excellently written . . Ohh. . .
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Wow
just wow, I'm sorry, but i just went speechless... Bravo on an alluring piece certainly worthy of another read! one second..
Whoa, yup, still speechless!
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love the picture- I love the poem, the title, and pretty much everything. This is definitely one of the better vampyre poems that I've ever read. It captures the reader, and was beautifully written. Great job
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This was darkly sweet and romantic. It captured my attention and kept me reading. It also goes great with that picture.
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Aww this poem is so sweet yet haunting. I applaud you my friend for this really is a masterpiece.
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I truly did enjoy this one...wandering, mystical
and hints of dangerous!
well done and so deserving of your Gold, Gold, GOLD!
A Poetic feast to be savored!
flamesdragoness
dang vamps! little nipper they are!
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I love the pictures
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I love it
wow the description and the feeling were moving you are a great poet I like it when it said A cold heart remembers well
the taste of her lips
the softness
pressed against his length
and living
in this moment with her
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Ah, wonderful. I am a string player myself, so i realy love the way you have written this, your choice of words.
Congrats on the gold, definatly desrerved it.
Well done, thanks for entering and best of luck.
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DAaaaaaaaaaaammmmmmmnnnnnnn
Flippin' freakin awesome
the tone
the flow
the voice
the perspective
the story
and it kinda sorta reminded me of anne rice
tho only slightly
because of the redhaired twins
but what i trying is that i love this piece
^-^ and congrats on your gold
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wow...what a luscious story that was, oh, the layers
of music and the violin we could hear softly playing
through out!
way to write, you should be really proud of this poem!
It's flow is beautiful and flawless.
way to Write!
ears/Seattle
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a beautiful melancholy tale "A cold heart remembers well" excellent line, and ever so true. Best of luck to you ~Bret~
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This is a poem with powerful images and well expressed feelings. Your use of musical terms in this piece is intriuging. Well done my friend.
Dennis
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This is a stunning poem - the pace and rhythm are exciting and the imagery and emotion are heart-wrenching fabulous! Good luck in the contests
Keep writing
Polly
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Bravo well done
A chilling tale of love and death. For none other than the undead. Great tale for living eh. Good luck in the contest
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this is awsome!
the charm, the music, the grace of the picture it paints...
50,000,000 stars Greg ^_^
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Great job!!
Intriguing write...love your musical metaphor....
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on!
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Very touching and full of heart. Great job.
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A sincere
Thank you! I do really like it. It is different for me.
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This is just true art here. I swear for some odd reason I was tearing up. I can't explain why, but it was so weird. It's true beauty in words. Amazing take on the prompt. In my opinion you need no luck for this contest for you have it in the bag.
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This is amazing being an ex violinist (many moons ago) I can feel the frenzy of his playing the emotions going through him..this has blown me away. STUNNING!
Good luck with this hon, gold for sure.
Love ~sweetness~ xxx
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