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She's Gone




i miss her beating heart
              the touch of her hands
              the kiss of her lips
              the voice of her love

i miss her pulsing desire
              the lick of her tongue
              the warmth of her body
              the liquid of her mound

i miss her utter bliss
              the angel of her smile
              the shine of her eyes
              the glow of her face

i miss her more than anything in this world




Author notes

I miss her more than anything...and we have zero chance of being together. As if she was my wife herself...Lisa is all I think about. It feels like she's gone for good...

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Thank you for your beautifully spoken submittal, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • K-9
    July 24, 2008

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    I suppose it is natural that the loves we lose are the loves ache for most. I like the things you chose to illustrate this. They are varied and personal. I'm not sure I would have put S2 before S3, but that is just my take. Do you mean "angle" in S3L2? Glad for the opportunity to read this!
    ~woof *dog


  • xxxLizardKingxxx
    July 20, 2008

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    I've read the comments before mine.All tastefully done.I don't believe I can add to what's been said.Well written my friend.I think this is good therapy for you.Keep writing.


  • ProudMomma
    July 20, 2008

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    sweetie this was an amazing write and i know how you feel i have felt this so much someday.. she will come around and not care about certain things... great write as always!!


  • Beauty Of Silence
    July 18, 2008

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    AWW

    this is such a saad poem! it almost made me cry (u have the potential to make me cry with all your touching words) This was so beautifully written and your last line was like the most impactful! keep the faith alive buddy! hope things lighten up for you!

    much love,
    Ranji


  • CharcoalScreams
    July 18, 2008

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    Woah this is amazing. Like, really amazing. Great work & all the best of luck for the contest. I think this piece definately deserves a ranking! =)

    All the best,
    Sammie xxxx


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    I'm sorry that you cannot be together.

    If she is alive, well, and happy - try to be happy for her. It is the only way to heal the gaping wounds you have inside.

    I thought this was a great write. I like the style, the simplicity, and the imagery. You appealed to a lot of the senses!

    Great job and good luck in the contest!

  • limechic
    July 18, 2008

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    its hard when you miss someone, when theres no hope of being with them. im sure she'll be back...maybe not in the way you want her...but she'll be back in your life eventually.

    great write, really beautiful and descriptive...the structure works well...good luck in the contest

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