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I miss you when i see the sunny skies.

I miss you when I see the sunny skies.
Or how it had hurt your eyes.

I miss your tiny hand and feet.
I remember the day we'd finally meet.

I miss when I fed you,you made such a mess.
I miss singing to you when you had to rest.

I miss your giggle most of all.
I miss holding you when you wiggled I never let you fall.

I miss you smiling when i said"are you going crazy"
I miss how you where so very lazy.

I miss your gentle breath on my face.
Holding you I knew your an angel from grace.

I miss playing "throw your toys".
I miss how you said"what are boys?"

I miss you saying "I love you mommy"
I miss tickling your chubby tummy.

I miss your kisses wet and sweet.
I miss how you said"birdie goes tweet"

I miss when I dressed you up cute and cuddly.
Then you run in the wet grass and got all muddy.

I miss you running and crying to me.
Because you fell when I said"don't climb that tree".

But the things i'll miss most of all.
Is things i'll never see,I wont be able to miss at all.

I won't see you graduate from college.
and say"that's my son so full of knowledge.

I'll never see you get married.
because it's my baby boy that I buried.

Or the grand kids you made for me.
Why didn't i wake up to check you in your sleep.

I woke up in the early morning.
Panic rising, why didn't I hear you snoring.

I raced to your crib as fast as I could be.
I peered over...your blue face is what i see.

I took your limp body cold in my arms.
My screams louder then fire alarms.

You would have loved your baby sister.
She just like you,she carries your picture.

She loves to get dirty in rain puddles.
I see her playing with ants,bent in a huddle.

I'll miss you everyday,so much love i'll have for you.
because my baby boy died at the age of just two.

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missing me was my choice

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  • K-9
    July 24, 2008
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    Losing a child would be the hardest thing to go through. I can't imagine the pain involved. I wish you well with that. As for the poem, I hope that setting it to paper helped in the grieving process. Given the subject matter, I will withold any critical review. Good luck in the contest!
    ~woof


  • X-ForsakenAngel-X
    July 19, 2008
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    thanks i always forget the apostrophes
    i didn't spell check it because i did last time and my poem got erased
    i didn't write this for myself my friends baby passed away a few months ago and its for her.
    i do have a son and if i ever lost him i would die myself.
    thank you!!!!


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    Whoa. That was... so haunting and upsetting. I can't imagine what that would be like - to lose your two year old son. How horrible!

    I'm so sorry for your loss, and I appreciate you sharing that here. I know that took a lot of strength and courage.

    I do have a few suggestions:
    *use spellcheck - you have countless spelling errors
    *"I" should always be capitalized.
    *"I'll" should always have the apostrophe.
    *"dont" should be "don't"
    *watch your spacing, make sure you have spaces between words
    *"The things I'll miss most of all
    ARE the things I'll never see, I won't be able to miss at all"

    Just go through and thoroughly edit this one. It's a great poem, with so much emotion and it really has the ability to connect with the reader. It desperately needs revision, though.

    Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Dygurl
    July 18, 2008
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    chilling, intensely sad. great outlet and memorial here.