As the days go by,
my soul rots away,
I'm not sure if i can take another day,
Life gets harder,
It gets in my way.
I don't know if i will be able to say today when tomarrow comes
because i simply feel like there is no possible way that i can take this life.
Sometimes i just want to take the knife and penetrate it through me, me and my sorry life.
Sin has takin my place
some people say its a disgrace
but i they just don't kno wat i face.
people they talk about how bad their life is
but don't realize how good it actually is.
When people look at me they say tisk tisk
but the truth is i'm running a SUICIDE RISK.
What do ya think??
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good emotional poem. i used to run a suicide risk as well. its tough. and people tease me about being so dark and emotional. they should go shove it. i can see that you feel the same. nice job!
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i can relate.
as you could relate to my poem, i was definately able to relate to yours. i've run a suicide risk. all i would fix is the grammar in the third verse, "but i they just don't kno wat i face." the rest of the poem is wonderful though. the grammar errors there though just stand out.
just some crit. have a nice day
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