This schizophrenic mind to which I do attest,
has brought me to the brink of life, a final rest
The visions that I've seen, which rules this world of mine
Can never be explained, or defined.
The extra peek I take at this void that's always there,
fills me with beliefs that Martians are now here.
They speak to me in tongues that tell of trying times,
then whistle as they leave, a tune that does not rhyme.
Curtains have been hung to hide them from my sight.
Releasing pungent odors, much to my delight.
Nails that pierce my brain, not visible to you,
are everlasting symbols of what my mind goes through.
The prognosis being bad, and doctors on the run.
I trump the world of normal, with words that seek out fun.
By H Rap Fox
Please tell me what you think
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wow... IM amazed.. thisis partly disturbing and greatly penned.. I enjoyed this poem a lot for its funny and the rhyme does not seem force but has an elegant flow... nicely done!
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HI Bob. I had signed on, I am not on here much anymore and I thought, where is Bob Fox! So I found this and love it. AS always you give a unique voice to a very complex subject/disease. A perfect balance of reality/sadness and humor.
blessings my friend,
Michelle
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BOB, How do you take a sad topic and give a fun twist.
You are amazing at that.
I enjoyed this read very much. Love the Martian line. 
Great stuff as always my friend.
Delila
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An interesting write on the threads of a woven mind. Through sanity to insantity the line greys and whispers call to play. You express those mystic thoughts well, subtle and pleasant on a disturbibg subject. A nice write...alby
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As always a fine read my friend, your words always have meaning thanks for sharing
Be Well
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Nicely done, Bob. You've captured the mix of bizarre behavior and suffering that accompany this particular situation. You have a keen eye for quirky humour and I like that your poetry often has a pinch of grit- that edge of street smarts, woven in among the pretty words. Cheers for the smiles this morning!
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Outstanding
I can't believe your mad so I assume this is a character. You make his madness seem very real. I liked the concept of the nails - I thought that was a strong image that really brought your message home. This is a thoughtful poem that makes me glad that I am mentally strong.
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My brother has this disease. Well written but I don't appreciate making fun of the disease. I am not in a good mood today as it is so I apolgize for the negative comment, however I find no humor in this piece.
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I know that like I said I haven't been in a real good mood this evening. I shouldn't comment on any more poems tonight. Have a good evening.
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Different, Bob...but I like it!
Nice to see you writing again.
Cheers,
Bill
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excellent
Sadness and humour in a very good mix Bob, its well written, intelligent and humerous, I like the second last stanza for some metaphorical reason...
thanks for sharing
John
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I liked the creativity you put into this Bob. Well versed and good work in the rhyming department! THANKS AGAIN!
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You are always so creative.....and you seem to always shead a little light of humor in everything you write ...I love that and admire it since humor is one thing I CANNOT write...This one brings several emotions...which, as I always tell you, is the best thing about poetry in my opinion!
Lynda
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Wonderful Poem!!
Good morning Bob. Glad to see you wtiting. I have as few schizophrenic friends and it is dificult for them to keep friendships. You bring a little humor to your words which lightens the mood for the reader. Ecxcellent rhyme too. A pleasure to read this morning. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Sandy
I do not get on AP much anymore for it seems there is not many interesting in writes other then sex/love stuff. But I ty as always.
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I see where you are coming from here. Dare to be different, my grandson was. He was autistic and saw our world quite differently from us normal[?] people.
This is an excellent piece if writing.
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I see a mix of funny and sad in this! Meh, the doctors have run from me too
I get ya!
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Woohooo! It rocks
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Well H Rap FoxThis is a wonderful poem filled with splendid imagery,and the rhyme is very well written.
You've made a believer out of me.
Thanks for sharing your Rapper's poem
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Whoopeee!
Whoopeee! You've done it again-crazy-yes, really authentic? DOUBLE YES... beautiful write and just my style! "Martians"...correct the spelling...(can't help it-it's work related)...love this Rap!!! Congrats
All the best!
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You know, I am not sure if this is meant to be a fun or a serious read, but good lord, I love it! I am sure some that suffer from schizophrenia would say you captured it quite well. And from what I have learned over the years, I would have to agree!
Great job on this one!
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Hi
And ty so much. I think a little of both can be said for this crazy write. Hope all is well dear poet.
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Good God Almighty from a bruning world of fire!!!
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