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http://allpoetry.com/poem/4445471 Part 2
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4449355 Part 3
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4466361# Part 4
- Independent Women group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Make me blush *Adults Only* by sensualbutterfly.
350 points, ended July 28, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ecstasy of Movement by MortalPhoenix.
700 points, ended July 30, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - sensuel, sexsual,Erotic by lonelyboy.
880 points, ended January 17, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh my...I must read on...


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Wow....ew.
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Thanks, did you finish this sexy little tale? You wont be sorry.
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It is very hot, enticing, exciting the reader in preparation for the coming parts. Distracting, but in a good way.
Good write.


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Well read on. Thank you for the comment.
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this was a great poem i did notice a few small boo boo's but other than that it was steal a slamming joint to read congrads on the trophies and many more


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Thank you, I never edit so I am not surprised. Thank you for the comment. Did you read the other 3 parts?
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SEXY, SEXY, SEXY!!!!!


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Thank you. I really enjoyed this. Believe it or not this is a true story. Most of it anyways lol.
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Very Nice
A wonderful start to a story that captures the reader for a must see the next part.
You tell a beautiful story.
I will not miss the rest of the story.
Don


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I typically don't read much erotica stuff because it always sounds the same to me, but this was different. You told you story and developed the feelings and let the reader witness the arousal first hand. It made for a good read and I will read more of your work to see how you develop this.

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This story is very fun, it turns a litte rough. But that is how I like it from time to time. Thank you for your comment! Means a lot to me.
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oh wowwwwwww! now I've got to talk with you missi! lol
too stunned to comment......

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Wow, that was an experience. Quite a read, felt like a bunch of thoughts and feelings just pounding into my mind. Ouch. Think I burned my eyebrows off.
Well penned.
~lost
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. I hope you read on? It get hotter.....might need something to keep from burning your skin off lol.
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This is very Hot for the short amount that is here. I see that you have other parts and so one must venture to read the rest.
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Why yes you do have to venture to read more. It gets pretty hot. lol make sure you check it out and let me know what you think?
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When I was making this contest I thought about restricting it to only poems, and this makes my very happy that I didn't. Thanks for entering!

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Well thank you so much. I write about what I live and live what I write. Well for the most part. It was one wild night! Good luck to all in the contest.
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wow naughty in such a lovely way spank spank!


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Thank you very much. Don't forget to read part 2 and 3. 4 will be posted sometime this week. Naughty is my middle name so to speak. lol
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Now that was HOT!! Very, very hot!!! Thanks a bunch for entering it
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As I expected this was the perfect build to Part 2. You have a gift I envy. I'm not very good with this kind of write although I love reading it. You do it very well. Pen on...hopefully to Part 3.

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LOL AT SPIDER! This is a scintrilating write leaving one flush with anticipation

just off to get some pop-corn for the next installment
Definately full with the substance of erotic sensuality. Thank-you for inviting me!


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Sure has my imagination going. Ican't wait to read more and see what happens. A true story hey? You sure know how to dance.
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Boy you can dance!
Now that's dancing, and a true story you say. Well you are a naughty girl, Lucky bastard your man is. I meant that in a nice way. Waiting impatiently for part two now, and I'll know when you finish as you're a favorite. What more can I say...but great story telling. -
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It is a true story, with my own words. In the up coming chapters I will be adding a few things to the real story just for fun. (that and I wished that is what really happened)
But yes, what do you think gets to a mans heart faster then food? The most amazing sex ever duh! lol Thank you for the comment and stopping by.
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A nice dance indeed, but what else would come from a free spirited dirty mind? Where is this to go? I'll be waiting for part 2.


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I am sure you cannot wait?
Did it move your member?
That would bring my dirty mind working, LOL
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need three parts..to this one
part two for you; part three for me
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WHEW!
UMM..YEAH, OK THAT WAS A NICE DANCE! YEAH... L.O.L.

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yeah you think? True story. lol
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Another hot story from your pen!

Great stuff and I'll be there as soon as I work out the best way to walk the Atlantic.

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girl, GIRL...!!
you'll finish this, I know, so I can finish the handfull that's 'come up'?! WOW!





















