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----------Part 2 - Adam - Chat with the devil

I opened my eyes to find myself in a dark room. Where was I? The first thing I noticed was a bright light to my left, engulfing the side of the room. The second was the ankle deep puddle that covered the ground. I got up, and studies the light, trying to figure something out.
  "What is this place?" I said to myself
  "This is the light at the end of the tunnel, kid"
I quickly turned, and noticed a strange man standing behind me. I couldnt make out exactly what was strange about him, but I couldnt make out any of his features either. Almost like a shadow of a man, yet he seemed completely there. He was right, it wasnt a room at all, it was a tunnel.
  "What tunnel?" i replied confused
  "THE tunnel. Dont you get it kid? your dead"
that news stuck me like a mallet. I instantly remembered everything that had happened. Zeik.
  "Dead...I cant be dead" I collapsed against the wall and put my hands to my head. That cant be it. Its all over, just like that?

  "Troubled, kid? Dont you watch any TV? this is the part where you walk in to the light and, uh, go to heaven...or hell. whatever u wanna think," Said the man. I glared at him.
  "What are YOU doing here then?" I said
  "What am I doing here? why, Im help you"
  "Help me? hehe how could you possibly do that? Im already dead," I said, almost hysterically. Dead. I heard myself say it, and yet, it still felt so surreal.
He gave me the wickedest smile I've ever seen at that.
"I can take you back"
  "...back? you mean like bring back the dead?"
  "Ding ding, we have a smart one on our hands," and at that, he gave me a dark look, and in a quieter, darker voice
"You died a man, and I can bring you back a God. You dont wanna go into that light. Your still young kid, your life awaits you. Your family, your friends...your little girlfriend"

It seemed like a no brainer. Even if I was just dreaming. But something didnt seem right about this guy. No. It doesnt matter how he seemed, he spoke sense. I CANT die at 17...I just CANT

  "What do I have to do?"
  "Nothing. Thats the beauty of it. All you do now is walk back into the dark of the tunnel, back into your body, back into your life"
My body. weird hearing that. It felt so real here, hard to imagine I wasnt in my body. I looked into the dark of the tunnel. I didnt wanna listen to him, but I had to. At least to see Tessa one more time...
  "Well?! Are you gonna go? Or just stand there staring at it," He said impatiently I ignored him. I was gonna take my god damn time. I cant screw up a decision like this.
  I began to walk into the dark, and I felt it getting quickly colder. I felt myself disappering into it as it engulfed me. As I began to lose all feeling, but kept going until I couldnt feel my legs and wasnt sure if I was still going or not.
  Thats when I opened my eyes to the cold hospital room



------------Part 1 - Tessa - "Please Dont Die"


The heavy, salty tears slowly began to roll downn my face as I realized the inevitable truth. Hes not gonna make it. I buried my face in my hands, beginning to sob. I know I shouldve had more hope in him. I know I should have been stronger. What good is crying gonna do? It wont save him. But I was scared.
  I felt so helpless sitting there in the waiting room. "Hes going to die," I thought, "just like dad did. and leave me here all alone." My mom put a hand on my back to comfort me. She wasnt sure what to say. She wasnt sure if there was anything she could tell me to make things better. There wasnt. "Please dont die, Adam," I said almost silently to myself
  Just as that and a million other things were going through my mind, I notice the doctor walking down the hall towards us. I expected, as I only could, that calm but troubled attitude, as the doctor tries to explain to us that he failed us. But something was wrong. I could see it right away on his face. Panic and confusion.
  "Hes gone," the doctor said. I felt my stomach churn to those words.
  "So he didnt make it," I said, as if repeating it would help
  "No, I mean he's literally gone!" Now THAT caught me off guard

  "what? what do you mean gone!?"
  "Hes not in his room. His vitals started going crazy, and he got free and just ran away"
  "Thats impossible! He could barely even move"
  "We thought so too. Hes on the move with several broken bones and a ruptured stomach. He shouldnt be moving, much less walking"

What were you thinking, Adam?

  "Where is he??"
  "He left the hospital"
  I didnt need to hear anymore. I turned and ran for the front door. I could hear mom and the doctor yelling, but I didnt care. I needed to find Adam.
  I ran through the front office and right out the front door. and thats where I saw it- an ambulance knocked on its side with a huge dent in the side, looking as if it had been hit head on by a car. but no car couldve come out of the hospital door and hit that ambulance
  "What the hell happened here?"


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ok yes, the part at the top comes after the part at the bottom, but with what i have now, that wouldnt make as much sense. ennjoy

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  • HURRY UP HURRY UP HURRY UP. FINISH IT FINISH IT FINISH IT. kyren!!!! that was awesome!!!! its like a pro wrote it!!! you have NO idea how jealous i am. i mean like FUC*! lolz.
    *HUGS* TAY.
  • -glare- urs r SO much better then mine. ur stories AND poems. its great kyren. i like the names too. lolz.
    *HUGS* TAY.

    • Kyren
      July 18

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      Aww, dont say that. you have a great way of telling a story. I cant wait to read your finished peice

  • miley24
    July 18
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    I Loved this.Its so cool.i mean its so good i cant put it in words.i hope you keep writing always.

  • hahahah cant wait to get the rest

    • Kyren
      July 18
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      lol yeah, i just wrote that bit this morning. I gotta change the name David though, cuz i just realized it sounds like hulk. lol
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