upon rivers bend clouds weep..
stars fall as souls dwindle
to ash... Write the words
upon the wall of eternity
[mo chuisle]
walls once built fell to dust,
leaving open the organ of life..
Cradled in hands so tender.
Yet breath flowed from earths core
ripping from within, soul's wish
of happy endings...
A chance, like the ocean gives before
it sweeps you out to sea, to drown you
in it's fury of unfair love and misery...
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This is a great write... I love your talent... and your contests too.... Your friend in Poetry... JackReed3....
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How true your words are...love and life are often not fair in anyway, yet we manage to move through them both...very emotional with beautiful flow and imagery...excellent work as always...
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Life and love are certainly unfair sis... to I think 80% of people! I feel your pain... and you express it so well!
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Oh Lord I can't write sex poems, seeing how I'm 15 for Godsakes...LoL
Anyways..."upon rivers bend clouds weep"
Did you meant 'bent clouds weep'?
"wall of eternity"
Whoa. That is nice.
"organ of life"
Why not 'life's organ'? Just a suggestion.
"breath flowed from earths core"
Apostrophe needs a home for 'earth's'.
"ripping from within"
Love that!!
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your awsome flower angel
you write beautifuli -
Heartbreaking and sad, it flows with a dark beauty... the emotions leave you breathless... A wonderful write..
Ken
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this is amazing, and yet so sad *huggels you*
i hope you get to feeling better, im here for you, and keep up writting, you know you do so lovely at it
stephanie ♥
your teddy bear
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Oh this is great. I like how you put mo chusile(my pulse) in there.
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I'm glad that you like it?
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No ? about it. Love it!
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ok.. I tried with this one..
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