Every night is the same.
I just sit here staring
Basking in my shame.
Taking you and him and comparing.
You are always there.
So big, so bright.
Filling my heart with despair.
But at the same time everything is right.
I love them both.
Its hard to tell.
I am amazed at your growth.
This my heart as been called to dwell.
He is gone.
He is here.
I am drawn,
To your atmosphere.
You're always here,
You're always around.
I never want you to disappear.
Hey moon, please forget to fall down.
Author notes
1. Song quotes. Always a fave. use the quote in your poem and put the quote in your AC, got it? good.
~Hey moon, please forget to fall down.
This one might be a little confusing. As am I. But I am compairing two guys, and how she will just sit and stare at the moon and try to solve her problems. She never feels whole like she does when she is staring at the moon. So she never wants it to fall.
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like how your wrote this. amazing write.
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It reminds me of the song "Stuck in the middle" by Clea.
I like it, very good way to express that.
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
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Heba -
Sweet write
The moon is probably a focus of many a stare filled emotion. Its soft glow and calm allows us to reel off our thoughts and worries, its like a mother to our soul, comforting and reassuring us
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confusing but delightful
i like this piece because it exemplifies a real train of thought. it's not just "this this this... that that that. line line line.... tada, poem." it's a salt and pepper of emotion. I can't speak for other people but it somewhat illustrates the order of my own busy mind. It's her today, it's that tomorrow. But for you, tonight it was the moon. that was your focus. that was the one thing to pull you back from this abyss of wild thought and longing.
lovely write, dear. hope to see more from you in the future. -
very unique poem, though i must say i'd be at a loss without your AC. THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU for following the rules, i cannot stress this enough T^T. Good write and good luck.
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I loved your poem, the comparisons. It was just so unique. Great write.
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Nice!
Beautiful Poem! Its Cool And If You Keep Up The Good Work You Could Go Places With This Poem So Keep It Up And Stay Focused! -
Nice!
Beautiful Poem! Its Cool And If You Keep Up The Good Work You Could Go Places With This Poem So Keep It Up And Stay Focused!
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