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Kiss of Succubus

Caught in ember's light
shroud of velvet burgundy flame
Hold her eye of green fires
she can see all seen within
spark ignites soul, burning desires
warmth beckons, hither
touch scolds, scars
flesh combusts
kiss of succubus

Author notes

Visual Stimulation: Behind Your Illusion II by littlemewhatever

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  • notorious gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    "Visual Stimulation" AHAHAH, that's much cooler than 'Prompt'.

    "embers light"
    I like this, but I want an apostrophe to make it 'ember's'...(:

    "shroud of velvet burgundy flame"
    Wow, intense description.

    "spark ignites soul"
    I'm sure it can...

    "kiss of succubus"
    Good phrase & title...& a succubus certainly suits the pic in some interpretations.

    Thanks for entering. (:


  • I.c.
    July 18, 2008
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    nice

    very different to read, short, but nice