a glimpse is all I offer
to all before the revelation
green eyes of envy pervade my
illusion of heather red and
alabaster skin
behind the look is a mind
that seeks
tempt the flame which only
smolders
Author notes
Behind Your Illusion II by littlemewhatever
photo prompt: (click to view)
http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2414/477.jpg?1216379827
A contest entry
- Mesmerizing picture #2 (PIF) by notorious.
789 points, ended July 19, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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your wording leaves much for the imagination, and I like that, since that is what great poetry is about!
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Nice - offering only a glimpse before revelation, green-eyed presence in the illusion of heather red, concealing a seeking mind, a smoldering flame. I like the use of "tempt" here - it could be either as a temptress or as a life-long learner.
Marlene -
"a glimpse is all I offer"
Sometimes a glimpse is enough...
"green eyes of envy"
Okay...not exactly unique here.
I do LOVE the words 'pervade' & 'illusion'.
"is a mind that seeks"
I like the simplicity here...& plus, suits the pic, for sure.
"which only smolders"
Sexy. =D
Thanks for entering (: -
This is a great take on the image.
I enjoy your word choices and style. Flows nicely.
Good luck in the contest. -
Excellent
Very powerful creation. So very well done. And perfect for the image. Best of luck in the contest
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Great
This is Great, the flow is there, the words lick my imagination well. Great job!
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