Freedom. Can it be defined?
We do live in a country
Unfortunately, full of crime.
Thats a path some do take
but it’s not a path of mine.
Freedom is taken for granted
Citizens don’t appreciate it as much as they should
I think to be a citizen,
I believe your supposed to.
There are even troops who fight,
Across the far seas.
Even though it might not be right,
They fight for us to be free.
On the other hand,
There are people like me,
Some Dixie chick fans
Use freedom to it’s full capacity.
Freedom means I can speak,
Speak my mind
In whichever way I please,
Beyond these lines.
Using my words as a vehicle,
It is I who holds the key.
A contest entry
- Allpoetry July New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended August 8, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You have expressed strong raw thoughts from your pen; an excellent show of you and your opinions
I like the Dixie Chicks reference as well, a little tongue in cheek but well used.
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Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering the contest
Well done. I really appreciate the words here and the meaning behind them. That it is through your own freedom of speech that you are able to speak your own mind.
Welcome to Allpoetry and I hope that you enjoy your stay
Thank you for entering our contest and I wish you the best of luck
Should you have any questions, please feel free to ask me
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I think this poem is based on a good idea and you really have a point with it. I love how you talk about war and the troops and then mention Dixie Chicks fans, that is quite a change of tone and it really works. I like the conclusion of this. The last one and a half stanzas are really good, though in the rest of the poem, you seem to force wording quite a lot for the rhymes. Also, you seem to be confused about the difference between adjective pronouns and possessives - you wrote "your" instead of "you're" and "it's" instead of "its". Other than that, this does have a good basis. Good luck in the contest
~Diana
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welcome to allpoetry
it is true, some take for granted all that we have and some abuse it far to much..freedom is never free and it has to be fought for on many levels.and it's price is sadly sometimes very high.I thank them all,any and all that fight for our rights, whether the carry a gun or a pen. well said and good luck in the contest!
Grey
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such power within this piece, can freedom be defined. that question really left me thinkiong about the answer and whether it could be. in some ways yes it can be defined but everyone would have a different definition. to me freedom is my art and poetry allowing me to express who I am but to others it may be spending time on their own. well done and best of luck in the contest
Charlotte
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I hear you on this one
Yes what is freedom and what does it take to understand it . Freedom to me is first learning to have and show respect to all you meet .To understand we all have our own ways of thinking and can speek our minds but in the same respect to show others the respect you so deserve .Freedom is living your life the way you want to but not imposing your ways upon another just because you feel its right because you thimnk it is .Freedom is teaching and protecting our children and teaching them in a way tht will see them safe in this world . We live in a country of many races and each race should have their own beliefes yet none of the races should be banned of their banners or flags for it may offend another . Fredom yes indeed in a mixmaster as we have here either we learn to have respect for one naother or the whole system will fall for their has never been a nation that hasnt fallen from the practice of greed .
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