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Ever were

 

We ran

through

long grass

galloped

like horses

on emerald,

 

played with

pale stones

in rapids of

the stream,

fish leapt

at red and

blue 

dragonflies,

cradled in

Welsh hills.

 

Ducats

flowed

through our

hands

into chests,

such silver

and gold,

while we

contented

ourselves,

in sea-faring

ultramarine.

 

High in the

mountains

our forests

kept warm

in russet,

as I broke

the ice for

our water,

smiling in

honour and

pride

you gave 

birth to our

first

in the cabin

of timbered

sienna.

 

Across

continents

our way

was

delayed,

nurtured

for

deepening

beyond

colours,

the beauty 

 

we found

in each

other again.

 

 

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 27, 2008

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    That sounds like a lifetime to remember. Great write, thank you for entering the contest, good luck.


    whisper


  • Sarah957
    August 23, 2008

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    If you return the favor would you please read and comment on http://allpoetry.com/poem/4537817 ?
    I am dying for feedback and no one has read it yet.
    Thanks!

  • Sarah957
    August 23, 2008
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    Do you believe in past lives? The idea is certainly an interesting one. I like the part about the dragon flies, it paints a very nice picture. And I thought the part about having the baby in the cabin was really sweet too. The life these people you write about lead seems like it would be more fullfilling then a life lived now.


  • Wind 03
    August 20, 2008

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    sweeeeeeeet

    i really loved the ending... beyond colours the beauty we found in each other again!very touching!your use of words are well written...well done my friend

    always with friendship
    juliet


  • Hetha gold member
    July 28, 2008
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    Congrats on winning Silver! You told a lovely story here.


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman
      July 28, 2008
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      Much thanks to you Hetha!

      ... ahhh 'Ladyhawk'... yes?

      Sol

      • Hetha gold member
        August 21, 2008
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        Kind of, the morph is that of myself(real pic-in black and white)and a peregrine falcon. I've actually had the pleasure of handling and training one. I learned from a falconer at a Rennaisance festival, who taught me how. the falcon is one of my many 'fylgia' the pictures were transformed into each other by maa. She did a wonderful job and I love it.


  • Angelflower
    July 27, 2008

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    aww! I really love this! it's so wonderful! the story that you have told in your words are so soft and full of love! it's truly amazing! I loved the image that you created as well! so colorful and full of life! Thank you very much for sharing.. I truly loved this write! best of luck to you!


    Angel


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman
      July 28, 2008
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      Much thanks Jetleena!

      I really enjoyed responding to your prompt and thank you for the 'shiny'!

      Sol


  • rhondasail
    July 25, 2008

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    I felt my own heart race in that first stanza and could sense the setting of the sun in days remembered beyond their singleness, into eternity...Ah...well written my friend. As a note, under the options tab at right there is the option to hide the background for those who have trouble viewing just the text. I love this background though, it evokes the sense of timelessness...the filtered light of a forest and the setting, or rising, of the sun...just a beautiful image. Love this one...I do say that alot to you don't I? ...Well, it's true...Peace and best of luck in the contest. Rhonda


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman
      July 25, 2008
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      Thank you Rhonda

      and also for the tip about the 'hide background', that hadn't occurred to me.

      Sol


  • Gwenevere
    July 19, 2008

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    A lovely piece complemented by a perfect background.Yes, there is a great deal of serenty in this write but there is much more.I think the word is peace.Well done on this one, Ros


  • Lucy.
    July 18, 2008
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    I remember. X


  • Elora Danon gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    This is beautiful. I'd like to comment more but words escape me on this topic. It's very close to my heart.

    e~

  • Amarige
    July 18, 2008

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    I enjoyed reading this piece Sol..I love your imagery here..and the sentiment of friendship and love portrayed...

    and Ohhhh the background picture is gorgeous!!...Dreamy view..and the colors are WOW..

    Excellent job and best of luck in the contest

    Ruby

    • Thoughts-of-Soloman
      July 18, 2008
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      Thank you so much Ruby.

      I love trees, sky and water, although there's no water in this one, only a silvered watery sunset.

      Sol

  • Rowan gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    Such serenity in your past life.  I hope this one is as beautiful and your love that simple.
    I used to always dream I was a dirty orphan on the streets of London; at least I think it was; cobblestones, the architecture, and the smells. Odd. I haven't had that dream for a really long time. I want yours.lol.

    • Thoughts-of-Soloman
      July 18, 2008
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      I guess I stay and favour the good memories rather than the not so good, when I can. Mind you, so much value I'm sure, in remembering the more trying ones in some ways.
      I have no doubt about your own 'serenity' as you wouldn't recognise any otherwise... would you?

      May you dream where your serenity comes from
      Thank you for your kind comment.

      Sol


  • NurseChilly gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    is that taken from your window?? looks like it.. and as for the words.. most beautimous my dear friend and so deep into the depths of what is Beauty and the loving ways of which it can be seen and held..

    lovely stuff

    Gilly.xxxx


  • butterflywriter
    July 18, 2008
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    this was wonderful

    good luck in the contest


  • faithwhisperer silver member
    July 18, 2008

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    Oh, I really love this, Sol! Best in the contest, and thanks for this write!

    PS...I still like this pic!

    • Thoughts-of-Soloman
      July 18, 2008
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      Thank you...

      I believe it's the only one at present because I wrote it as soon as Angels prompt sprang up. Couldn't resist!

      So glad you like it.

      Sol

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