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paris night of 1968

 

 

i've cared for you in ways

i'll never truly understand

and neither will you

 

i find myself

here

once again

questioning

too many things

smoke sticking

to you -

i know you've been

smoking

although you swore

you quit

 

 

we stand

too close to

the eiffel tower

and i'm lost

because in paris

there is magic

 

 

our souls transended

time

i'm different

by your standards:

 

 

i smile slower

and never meet

your eyes

that's a mistake

i've learned

yes, i have learned

 

 

you're like a cancer

and i'm slowly

dying from you

1968-

that was the year

of the flood

 

 

we waded deep

to our waist

and i'm scared

to be

myself around you

anymore.

 

 

and i wonder

do you love

me anymore

or who

i used to be -

i'm not her

 

 

but i still have

her heart

and it's not

fair.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

image (c) anjelicek ; so i'm obsessed with paris. gotta make a list for it.

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  • iamlost gold member
    August 6

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    An amazing story you've told here, the flow of this works very well, as the deep thoughts are spread across the page in this poem. Well penned, I really enjoyed reading this.

  • Eusebius
    July 24

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    A very mysterious piece and soooo romantical, indeed. So deftly done throughout--not the usual fare seen from one so young--another fine, fine piece of poetry. bravo... bravo.. bravo...

  • Yellowdogpoetry gold member
    July 22

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    I was hooked by the title right away, I mean right away! So pleased to read this wonderful, intelligent poetry. Great story, so many wonderful lines. Love the skin of this piece. Geo

    . Rewarded 4

  • ocerus
    July 22
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    This is childish at times but overall it's pretty good. Kudos! - oce
  • sgking123
    July 22

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    excellent

    i smile slower

    and never meet

    your eyes

    that's a mistake

    i've learned

    yes, i have learned

    I love your wordings.How did you conjure such emotions.Loved it very much.Please visit my poetry and offer your comments.


  • Ken-Maverick gold member
    July 22
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    Love it

    especially the line "our souls transcended time i'm different by your standards..."
    good one

  • samm
    July 18
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    i was hooked


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 18

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    Oh this is delightful dear, and these pictures are awesome. I find your pensive interpretations to be fascinating in that you are speaking in the first person. You are quickly grasping the language of poetry at a phenomenal rate.


    All the best in the contest.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.

  • michael thomas
    July 18
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    you write delight
    stories so tight
    make words flight
    I enjoy....

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