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Desolate Angel

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In cyclonic winds
desolation screams.
Sorrows bleeding
inside all dreams.

Broken heart embossed
with flames of hell.
As overgrown despair,
begins to swell.

Desperate horizons,
converge so deep.
Scourging my soul,
devouring all sleep.

Wistful entities,
fly and dance.
Consuming thoughts,
with a single glance.

Old scars etched,
within blue veins.
Core sorely ravaged,
by uncensored pain.

The thick air chokes,
in this abandoned zone.
Left wholly forsaken,
and eternally alone.

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Credit; - deserted - by =night-fate

My muse has run away...

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 23, 2008

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    once again i find myself in awe with you pen i mean seriously, you are ten times better then you claim to be and more, keep it flowing and congrads in the contest


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    Wow this was soo beautiful & dark.
    Loved your imagery and brilliant
    vocabulary as well.

    Great metaphors & use of poetic devices.
    A most wonderful read.

    Best of luck in the contest


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    September 10, 2008

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    Just great to be back and readin your dark words again my darkone

    Lov'd --
    Wistful entities,
    fly and dance.
    Consuming thoughts,
    with a single glance.


    But well, lov'd it all hehe
    Thanks so much excellent work

    Good luck


    Cind's


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    Beautifully penned...

    I've got to say 'Your analogies, metaphors & descriptions get better & better...
    Yet another write that had me captivated throughout...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    Your muse has NOT run away at all!!!!!

    Oh WOW hunny that is perfect! It seems all has sought to surrender her sorrow in force!!

    That ending ... my god.. that got to me!! So desolate!! I think that verse is gonna haunt me for some time!!

    AWESOME!!! I mean it!!




  • crimsondew
    July 19, 2008
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    All the best dear!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 19, 2008
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    Let me know when it's done
    Yep, stealing this background

  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    July 18, 2008
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    let me know if this is good for you or if u need another my darkone

    http://paradiseblistered.deviantart.com/art/crimson-glaze-91302529


  • Angelflower
    July 18, 2008
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    who would have ever thought! lol.. Good luck!


    • LadyDementia gold member
      July 18, 2008
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      I know shocker


      • Angelflower
        July 18, 2008
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        yes.. almost stopped my heart!


        • LadyDementia gold member
          July 18, 2008
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          Oh no! Dail 999 quick..or is it 911...lol good luck to you to hun...oh if you see my muse catch it for me

          • Angelflower
            July 18, 2008

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            Lol..It's 911 and they would take too long to get here..lol.too many donuts .. lol. You and me both!! my muse went wandering again..

            • LadyDementia gold member
              July 18, 2008

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              I thought it was police that ate all the donuts? I watch far to much simpsons I will, slap and send back if I see it

              • Angelflower
                July 18, 2008
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                Lol. not here!!! alot of the people here are like... boats!!!! lol.. don't really watch the simpsons..Lol. Yay!! it needs a good slap or two!!

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