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and sunlight ignores our demands

 

 

 

 

 
an honest view

holds all the best lies 

 

wounded like this
so far
from the hour
 
 
in irony,
the remains
of sunlight
 
refuse to leave
 
 
 
when all else
did
without asking
 
when the brightest corpse lost her wings
and they her
 
 
 
all buried in darker
soil of mind
 
lain down with each
other
 
beneath the field

 

to share
something of alone
 
while she shuts the door
to the sky,
 

 

 
it is not worthy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: "There are no facts, only interpretations."
- Frederich Nietzsche

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  • Naridill
    August 21
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  • Never Fall in Love gold member
    August 3
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    excellent


  • MuddyKing Moderators member
    July 18

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    I can only repeat what's been said...this is beautiful
    sad and needed it seems...almost like realization
    and death always has this effect on us..well those that can care
    excellent
    peace and hugs
    Muddy


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    July 18

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    Nietzsche.....

    Not sure what your view of him is, but he's one of my favored madmen..
    Also someone who knew alone... intimately I suspect before he lost his mind.. or ....in my interpretation before the pain of humanity simply became too much to take...

    The first line of this cuts to the quick.. for me.. as yes, in my eyes an honest view learns rather quickly how not to be that ...

    and the sunlight here, that star.....is like watching an endless day, a dusk that refuses to settle..

    the abandonment..
    when I decided to have children, foolishly I believed those I called friends.. when they said, we'll be here for you...
    and then watched every one of them walk away... every last one of them... as if I was suddenly a plague ..
    that was nine years ago..

    things like that never fully go away, like that sun, they blur the sky with colors that refuse to bring the relief of night... because they whisper over and over, why, along with where did my judgment go so wrong...


    I've said too much already here...
    for an introvert...

    so I'm going to stop...and leave this..





    • NurseChilly gold member
      July 18

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      only you, would stop ... when you are saying so much
      so profound, the absolut sum of madness is all we have left at times and even the tangible moments of madness verses clarity can be unbearable..

      i like what you've said and you should say more

      yes


  • Rowan gold member
    July 18

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    So beautifully sad, and painful. I think everyone at one time or another has felt this kind of aloniness; different as circumstances are; hearts are the same.
    My mantra remains; 'this too shall pass', and the sunlight will feel the warmth of your smile again, I know it.
    Love ya Kate.


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    July 18
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    just a for now.


  • Cat gold member
    July 18

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    beautiful... sad

    brightest corpse- i wonder if we all feel like that at times
    with the "if they only knew who i really am"
    voice echoing..

    beautiful , sad

    m


  • NurseChilly gold member
    July 18
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    sometimes we unravel and see things we don't like, and other times this mortality we carry becomes heavy like lead.. but tote that load... barer of the fruit you are, is the tree of Kate, it feeds us plenty and ripens with new fruit.... we grow, we shed, we bare witness...

    it's all in the rings..

    be happy dear one

    Gilly.xxx

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