...get this old?
did we walk one day,
take the sun, hide it
in the shadows of long held dreams
shared hands, milk smooth
of youth and kisses on skin
those days you aspired to be
the poet
I was the muse
giving your fingers life,
texture tingled,
shivered
and was brought into being
we felt everything
together as Romulus & Remus
the suckling of young
at the vixen's belly
twin thoughts
and love appeared
as the day touched night
under our bodies
stars blessed us
and no one saw the crossed comet,
blazing trails across a melting face
moon waxing, waning under years,
they went by us so fast,
no chance to grab hold
to live forever
seems memory dims
and as I look at you
the vague familiar rose,
dipped and steeped in red,
where we sipped each other;
comfort and warmth
it's still there
and even in the twilight
I can remember why
I fell in love with you
when did we...
get this old?
still feels like the first day
Author notes
Some people just make you want to grow old with them sigh...
A contest entry
- ....only for members of the group WHEN ALL ELSE FAILS................. by CinfullyDelicious.
700 points, ended September 16, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh god Cuz
I MISSED YOU SO MUCH.
I missed your poetry so so so much
this poem is exactly why missed it
I missed how you make me sigh....but thank you for giving me that chance here, again now
Just wow descriptions, I feel pouring from a hert that feels love
Good luck darl
Cind
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Wonderful dear! How time flies very very true
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intricate
I enjoyed the controlled drift of this piece, like the passage of time.
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I wanted it to reveal that drift of a conversation between true love and age, I like the fact you got that.
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"...get this old?"
HAHAHA, it's groovy that the title's part of the poem. & what a question...
"hide it"
The sun cannot be hidden, only blocked by the use of sunscreen and seeking shade...
"those days you aspired to be the poet"
Those days are over for you Ms Crazy Fireshooter. Ditto for Dan.
"Romulus & Remus"
OMGOMGOMGOMG I only understand your were-wolfish reference because of HARRY POTTER....I LOVE THIS...& I'm sure Dan did too.
There's nothing like a reference one understands (I hate it when I don't get references =[)
"the crossed comet"
Pretttttty phrasing.
"vague familiar rose"
LoL...makes me think of somebody unused to love...and that's kinda amusing.
Good luck! (:
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And it will always feel that way in your embrace, Wonderful Chez!
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sigh...thank you my love
C
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Call each other by your names dammit!
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lol Well he is calling me by my name lol no one ever calls me Cheryl, not since I was a little girl lol...blame my mother!!! And ok..."Thank you DAN, my love" Is that better
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And when you find that one person it would be a crime not to reach out and draw them to you.
I love the way your words meander along like a comfortable conversation with someone who knows you so well.
Best wishes in the contest
Love Margaret
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Yes I think we are so comfortable and meander a lot actually
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I'm pleased that you have such happiness, we deserve it
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Unfortunately, my mid-life crisis screwed up the chance to grow older with the one I chose in my youth but maybe I'll get lucky. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Then be like me choose one now and maybe you'll have a chance like I do
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if you asked for anything else...i'd be worried your feeling sick hehehe
Credit Love by mieshangall from photobucket
if u dont like, can always give you another, but im sure you will
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I love it
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