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I Remember When...

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searching your lips as you drew me closer,
shivers of wanting from the touch of your hands;
I remember the feelings...




we used to linger beneath each tree as
you walked me home at night; your
tender kisses left me dizzy

pirouetting through magenta clouds as
turquoise whispers painted
the colours of your smile

amber flecked eyes gazed back and
I could feel your promises as they
wrapped themselves around me




but time passes swiftly;
tinted incantations swirl and fade
into the nothingness of tomorrow







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  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    September 10, 2008

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    I just loved reading this mum, even though it hard a sad ending ..just so well written
    just wonderful imagery...

    pirouetting through magenta clouds as
    turquoise whispers painted
    the colours of your smile

    amber flecked eyes gazed back

    A well penned piece, a great inspiration from the picture, thanks Mum and good luck


    Cind's


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    August 6, 2008
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    i agree with kiwi, the ending is sad
    but your words are so beautifully penned


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 29, 2008

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    Aww.. that's such a sad ending.. yet so true to life often! This is beautiful! All those memories of young love and how it used to be! And a loneliness at the end there...

    You always write so beautifully hun!



    • Margaret Denham gold member
      July 29, 2008
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      *sigh* I know it's sad but it was the only place the picture took me. I remember the feelings when you first meet a boy and think he's special and all those little tingly moments but it never lasts. I guess it's a part of growing up that we go through.

      Thank you for your wonderful comment honey, it was very much appreciated, believe me

      Love Margaret


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 19, 2008
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    Please let me know when this is done


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    July 18, 2008
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    or let me know if ya dont like it etc


    • Margaret Denham gold member
      July 18, 2008
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      I love it honey and it's fine just as it is

      Now I have to find the words for such a gorgeous picture




    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      July 18, 2008
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      ohhh i didnt expect it to come up like thaat lol..i think i copied html not link but thts cool lol

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