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Im Better Then This

I am better
better then you give credit
I bet it
was easy for you to regret it.
I never thought you
to be so used to
the noise comming out of your own mouth.
Its time for me to get out
im about
to stand on my own two feet.
your irreverance is prevalent
I wasn't ment
for such malevolence.
Im better then this
Im better then this.
I'll take back my innocence
my essence
and I wish you best in
all that you do
but all that I knew
is no longer true.
so I bid you
adieu.

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Ambrea

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 22
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    a nice piece

  • Still Standing gold member
    January 12
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    Great job really hearfelt and real! I loved it!


  • StarvingAuthor
    September 22, 2008
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    little forced but the spirit is right on.


  • written-in-ink
    September 7, 2008

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    wow

    intense

    i love it
    and i feel all the pain
    or anger

    in anycase
    amazing!


  • unavailable
    September 3, 2008

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    my favorite part......

    I am better
    better then you give credit
    I bet it
    was easy for you to regret it.

    I liked everything else too.

  • ffgoldensun
    July 27, 2008
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    can you rap out it for me?
    XD
    i like the structure
    good work


  • subliminalj
    July 18, 2008

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    This is good. I love the rhyming scheme. So fluid. Really good job, and all the best luck in the contest.


  • CrazyC87
    July 18, 2008
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    nice baby. I'mma havta bust out my thesaurous on a few of those words tho


  • DogTagz-TheJalapeno
    July 18, 2008

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    HAHA. What a rap. Its too proper to be a rap. But I liked it. And Its rapable,just super proper.


  • Beauty Of Silence
    July 18, 2008

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    omgosh!!!

    i love this! i love this! i love this! especially the last line "adieu" it ended in a calm tone yet it somehow sounded like "get lost" it left me with mixed emotions! but i know i love this! (okay now i'm just repeating myself)

    this is a beautiful poem, and yes, we're all usually better than what we get credit for... this was an honest write and many can truely relate to this! wonderful poem!

    keep penning! never stop!

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