He stares from across the lake
as she droops her head in frail.
Shards of heart shadow brisk step.
A meek and fragile flirt goes stale.
Rejection my old friend,
like a dying rose he cries.
He’s crucified once more.
Takes will for a broken heart to sigh.
Footsteps drag across his mind.
She’s fixed on being dead to men.
As the boulders of rape drag behind her,
he cries himself to sleep again.
The morning sheds another day
and her memories remain.
She’s dragged back to the lake once more,
by a force she cant explain.
Surprised to see him lying there,
she digs within her pile.
He stands and turns away
and says he cannot smile.
The years of hate and heartache,
have torn apart there lives.
Though opposites attract
and broken hearts deprive.
They stare beyond each others eyes
and grasp the mess inside.
There souls combined surround them,
like a snowball two halves collide
Like brush strokes and sweet array,
with eyes as full and rich as jade.
Is this how gods are made?
No! sometimes; It’s just what it takes…
Author notes
All critics welcome
A contest entry
- Heal my broken heart!!!!!! by hopelesspoet.
950 points, ended July 18, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rape by Angelic Vampiress.
600 points, ended July 20, 2008, 18 entries
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There souls combined surround them,
like a snowball two halves collide i believe should be their instead of there.
But awe inspiring piece that it is. i love how you pulled the reader in. to feel the pain that he may have. but yet again the pain that she must bring.
the lake is a symbol, of what i do not nkow. but we all have our spots where we must go. thanks for sharing and congrads on the bronze.
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As much as I enjoyed it, I have to disqualify it. you should have read the rules. you are not allowed to enter a prewrite if you already won a trophy or hm on it. but thank you for entering.
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very good poem I likeed it alot good luck
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Wonderful
I enjoyed reading this; very well written with unique diction. I believe my favorite stanza is the third, specifically the last three lines. Wonderful job.
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this is a very well written poem it has alot of hurt and pain in it and i am sorry if this is true for you but it will get better and easier good luck to you in the contest blessed be
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