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You've Chambered the Last Round

I heard your screams of tormented agony
And ran to aid your escape.
I tasted your tears as they silently fell
And wiped them all away.
Now all you can do is shout at me
And tell me all I've done wrong.
And all I can think
Is how this will end,
With you unable to dwell on me.
This is the last time
I'll take shit from you.
You don't deserve the truth,
And all I can feel
Is the pleasuring cold metal
Of the pistol within my hands.
You dare release your judgement on me
When I was always there.
And all you remember
Is all our fights
And how much you wanted me dead.
Where were you when I needed you?
Out drunk at another party?
High at another club?
You don't remember the night you died.
You were blinded by the fury
Of another flaming shot.
You won't get the chance again
To feel that drunken hatred
Because this time the pistol is loaded
And at point blank range,
It's hard to miss.

Author notes

This is a combination of 2, 4 and 7.

This is a very dark poem, but it's not personal.

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  • manwithshoesforhands
    July 27, 2008
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    A brilliantly written poem, full of emotive language and imagery kudos xxx