behind emerald set pins
lies the heart of deception,
illusionary drinks you in
never setting a heart free
will you take the leap with me?
Or just quake beneath deep eyes
and try to breathe
for every hologram you see
inside an iris spell
I see a man ready to fall
I am your wishing well
Author notes
Behind Your Illusion II by littlemewhatever
In a list
A contest entry
- Mesmerizing picture #2 (PIF) by phantasyintrigue-x.
789 points, ended July 19, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Mazel tov
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Yes.
"I am your wishing well."
You put this together beautifully.
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Ah, magical and soft, like an alluring dream my dear, well done and all the best.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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I love that image...
and your take on it.. yep,
her eyes look like pools you could fall into
and I think you capture that ..
especially in your last line..
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Thank you, she was too beautiful to make her too evil lol and men are like pennies well sometimes
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Like damn, she is hot...LMAO
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often I'd say...
welcome.... and good luck!
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What happened to crediting the artist? Must I shoot you?
But desde luego, I wouldn't.
"emerald set"
Hyphen calls to be placed here. Please do so.
"lies the heart of deception"
Oh, how bittersweet.
"illusionary drinks you in"
I LOVE THAT. You paid attention to the title?
"Will you take the leap with me?"
Could mean a helluva lotta things here.
"for every hologram you see
inside an iris spell
I see a man ready to fall"
Oh, how cynically poetic!! I like the word 'hologram' and "iris spell" is GORGEOUSLY phrased. That last line is killer strong.
"I am your wishing well"
Intriguing and weird, consider the line before it.
Good luck (: (: -
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You beat me to the credit lol I got it done but flatly refuses to hyphenate anything Not the Aussie way Sue me!!!!lol
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Oh God my heart hurts w/o the hyphen
AHAHAHAHAH...well, I'm only partially kidding.
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