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Heat (Haiku)

unbearable heat
moisture drying instantly-
an earthworm shrivels

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Griswold

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  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 22, 2008

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    Thank you for your Haiku:

    unbearable heat
    moisture drying instantly-
    an earthworm shrivels

    That's unique and splendid.
    Vivid imagery has been created in this Haiku along with the mention of summer.

    Thanks again.

    Harrisham Minhas

  • saddie23
    July 20, 2008

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    too cool, what part of the states u live in to see earthworm shrivel? like ur ku, and made me smile. Saddie23


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    o0o0o this is a clever litle piece and I adore the way it builds up the images yet I didnt enjoy an image of a shrivelled worm lol


  • mrocun
    July 18, 2008

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    This is nice indeed.
    Builds a clear image.
    I wonder though...
    is there a deeper meaning?

    Samuel