we could eat stars
if they were life
that sustains us
all the green cheese
in the moon would
never be enough
yet one touch
of your lips
against mine
opens hearts;
is hungrily fed
in love's first kiss
Author notes
pic credit:An Eternal Kiss by ~MisterHip
Do I need to tell you who its for? lol
A contest entry
- Hello Writers by luna-midnight.
1000 points, ended August 3, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh to feel this kind of love......::sigh::.....Just beautiful my friend!!!
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this is lovely. such a wonderful poem.
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awwwwwwwwwwwww how sweet...... loves first kiss.... what a great experience..... thanks for sharing this with us...... good luck in contest!
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awww this is beautiful, and hahaha, no you do not, im a psychic and know these things
but this is so sweet and a great write, good luck
thanks for entering, stephanie ♥ -
Oh god wtch out another sigh moment
the opener -
we could eat stars
if they were life
that sustains us
that is just so perfect Cuz..I feed on your every description of love...pouring from beating heart..and you know I do hehe
but that is just explicitly amazing to say it like that...to open the poem up to the reder with that
then the ending stood the test of time to me...
is hungrily fed
in love's first kiss
sighhhhhhh bloody sighhhhhhhhhhhh hehe
Your just on fire with these writes of love....and I couldn't pass reading a single one
Cind's
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Sigh...I wonder if it is this wrong to feel this good lol
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no way
hehe
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It's in the present tense. That was no accident, and I know it.
"is hungrily fed"
HAHA I just had dinner, but I appreciate this line if taken literally.
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could I eat him? LOL Not telling, you're too young
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Isn't that the damn truth
(:
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LoL if you're against him, well...tough.
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Trust me that's exactly where I wanna be...against him hahaha ...you had to ask didn't you!
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CORRUPTING CHILD MINDS...eh, I was already corrupted, I just wanna blame you
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Errr
not against him lol but some boy!!!!
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hehehe trust me you'll do it too one day
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