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Sweet Sacrifice

Eyes grow wide as the tears fall, blood red
but relax, my darling, as the knife goes in again
For if you close your eyes I can make it go away
dreaming once more of the silence I will bring
at your death, at the end of your screams
These painted lips that spread wide in a smile
waiting for you to press yourself against them
capture this sharp kiss; it's only in your mind
If you close your eyes to watch the darkness grow
spreading inside to consume you in flame

it's only in your mind, but I make it real to you
The fearful pulse pounding in her neck as I break it
and knowing you are next is the gift that I give you
As I let her fall, slit your eyes to find my footsteps
before I crush your world with the promise we made

shattering the mirror I found in your words

I remove myself from you, and wash my hands in blood 

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Inspired by Evanescence's "Sweet Sacrifice" and the quote "Fear is only in your mind".

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  • squirrelgirl
    January 24

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    Yays for you, you got a trophy, and it wasn't an honorable mention! This poem is all darky and sad. It reminds me of the play I'm in now, all the depressingness of it all. Wah.
    ~squirrel


  • eagleluv
    July 25, 2008
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    Excellent poem great write, Good luck in the cintest


  • ShadedRequiem
    July 17, 2008

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    This is a beautifully dark poem. I love the imagery and I love the language and how you partry the killer. It's really great. Alyssa


  • ea silver member
    July 17, 2008

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    wow, not the kind of thing I normally run into here since I tend to stay in the contests I'm in but am checking out new poems today and recognized you - where have you been in the forums lately? All the best. Sorry, (I'm not that familiar with Evanescence to know what to think of this.)